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Please, Sir... Can I have some more reviews?



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Sun Apr 18, 2010 2:05 pm
SameOld says...



Can I have a review please?

Here it is - viewtopic.php?t=61366

Thanks in advance :)
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Sun Apr 18, 2010 5:31 pm
Sins says...



Yours is done SameOld! :D

Anyone else fancy a review...?
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Sun Apr 18, 2010 6:00 pm
Esther Sylvester says...



Hey skins! I got the fifth chapter of my romance novel up. Would you be so kind as to review it for me? Your other reviews were very helpful. Here is the link:

topic62219.html

Hope you like it!
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Sun Apr 18, 2010 7:05 pm
RayquazaKid says...



Hi, can you review this for me?

topic62061.html
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Sun Apr 18, 2010 7:08 pm
Sins says...



Yours is done Esther! :)

I'll get onto yours now RK.

Edit: I've completed yours now RK. Hope I was helpful :wink:
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Sun Apr 18, 2010 8:38 pm
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Yes, thanks for the review. I fixed most of the things you pointed out (though there were a couple I disagreed with). Thanks so much though. :D

Umm.. also in the thread (in a spoiler at the top of the page) is also the chapter preceding the one you reviewed. Can you take a look at that one as well?
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Sun Apr 18, 2010 8:42 pm
Sins says...



Yeah, to be honest, most of my comments were suggestions! I couldn't really find anything to critique :lol:

Sure, I'll take a look at the preceding chapter. :)


Edit: I'm done with the other chapter RK
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Thu Apr 22, 2010 1:08 am
Jas says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post693172.html#p693172

It's a love story that was supposed to be for Elinor Brynn's winter love contest but I was err...a little late :). If you could review it, I will send you a cookie! Thankies!
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Thu Apr 22, 2010 1:25 am
RayquazaKid says...



I have posted the next chapter of my novel.

topic62432.html

Por favor? :D
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Thu Apr 22, 2010 3:00 pm
MiaParamore says...



Can you do chapter -4 of my novel A Criminal's Heart? Thanks in advance!
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Thu Apr 22, 2010 4:01 pm
Sins says...



Viola 8)

Done yours shubhi, RK and jas!

Anyone else?
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Thu Apr 22, 2010 5:55 pm
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Would you do the review for a Non-Fiction piece titled Just 1411 left I have written this for my school magazine and I need a quick reviews if that's possible. Thanks in advance.
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Thu Apr 22, 2010 6:23 pm
Sins says...



Done! 8)

Anyone else want my amazingness...? :wink:

And yes, amazingness is a word because I'm cool and I use cool words.


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Thu Apr 22, 2010 6:45 pm
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hey, this is a great idea! shucks, thanks :-D please review my poem:

"Love from Afar"
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=62384

and my story

"The Elephant in the Room"
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic57663.html#p650389
thanks a million!

by the way, how do you insert the links so that the titles show instead of that messy URL?
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Thu Apr 22, 2010 8:32 pm
Sins says...



Done yours etherealember :D

Anyone else fancy a review?

I'm hungry... :smt002 and the ham sandwich I just had didn't fill me up... :(
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