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Thu Dec 09, 2010 1:12 am
SilentRain says...



Hay, I'm Rain, I'm a poet, this is my first attemp at writing a novel. This is the Prologue...

Thanks,

~Rain~
topic68479.html <---- Click here to have your poems reviewed!

Theres always a rainbow after the Rain!!!!!!!
  





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Sun Dec 12, 2010 2:31 pm
Lava says...



Done!
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- Ian McEwan in Atonement

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Sun Dec 12, 2010 4:56 pm
AngerManagement says...



Lava could you please -pretty please with cherries on top- review my -longish- short story http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic73136.html
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Sun Dec 12, 2010 7:44 pm
IsebellaLynnette says...



Hey there Lava! :D

So this is the either the prologue or the first chapter (I haven't decided yet because it's pretty long for a prologue) of my NaNo novel, Against All Odds. It's a mix of fantasy and action/adventure. Warning that it has been minimally edited so that my muse wouldn't go beserks over it during November. XD And also, I really don't care what kind of review you give me--whatever floats your boat. :)

NaNo Prologue/Chapter 1
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Mon Dec 13, 2010 3:57 am
SilentRain says...



Hello!! So, you don't have to do this, it is a collection of poems I am considering sumiting to the YWLJ...

Click on the link for more details...

viewtopic.php?t=72999

Thanks,

~Rain~
topic68479.html <---- Click here to have your poems reviewed!

Theres always a rainbow after the Rain!!!!!!!
  





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Sun Dec 19, 2010 8:33 am
MiaParamore says...



Hey Lava.

Mind doing a review? Here's it:(you've read the first two parts, only I posted it from BlueShubs, and now I've changed the title, too) Know I'm Here(2)

Thanks a bunch,
Shubhi
"Next time you point a finger
I might have to bend it back
Or break it, break it off
Next time you point a finger
I'll point you to the mirror"

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Sun Dec 19, 2010 2:23 pm
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post797963.html#p797963
It's the first chapter of my novel- 'Wings and Fins'.
  





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Sun Dec 19, 2010 3:23 pm
Lava says...



Okay guys, I shall get to these reviews now. Please don't request for anymore. ^^
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Pretending in words was too tentative, too vulnerable, too embarrassing to let anyone know.
- Ian McEwan in Atonement

sachi: influencing others since GOD KNOWS WHEN.

  





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Sun Jan 02, 2011 4:10 am
cormacquinn says...



May you please review and critique my first chapter. You can read the what kind of review I would like in the topic thread. Thanks a lot for even reading it, I'm sorry if it seems too tedious. Thanks very much in advance.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post801572.html#p801572
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Tue Feb 22, 2011 2:13 pm
EiggyPiggy says...



Hi Lava ! Nice to see Indian :)
Hey,I desperately need your critique on this topic76672.html
I'll be restive untill I get one. :)
Have a nice day !
Unfortunately, You become what you think 24*7
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Fri Mar 25, 2011 5:47 pm
foreveradreamer says...



Would you review this for me please? :) viewtopic.php?t=78140
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Sat Apr 30, 2011 8:44 am
JJxVoodo says...



Hey, these are the first 3 chapters of my romance novel. Could you review?

Thank-you
JJxVoodo

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topic80072.html
topic80137.html
Maybe imperfection is the best thing, for without imperfection neither you nor I would be here today.
  





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Mon May 02, 2011 10:41 am
Lava says...



I'm planning to do a 100 reviews this month, so about 4 reviews a day. If I'm free-er I'll do more, so go ahead, post your requests, I'm not restricting posts per day or anything.

I accept any prose except fan fiction. Poetry, only ask me if you's like some half-coherent thoughts. And any Art/Photography is okay too!
If you want review on a particular chapter, please let me have a summary.

If you want me to look at something in particular, you can ask. If you need help with grammar, I'd be happy to help out.
Otherwise, I'd go about commenting on the story, description and a few nitpicks(I just can't seem to not point them out)

And, if it's a novel with 3+ chapters, I'll take up only one. And once that's done, I'll let you know.

:)
Last edited by Lava on Tue May 03, 2011 7:35 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Pretending in words was too tentative, too vulnerable, too embarrassing to let anyone know.
- Ian McEwan in Atonement

sachi: influencing others since GOD KNOWS WHEN.

  





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Mon May 02, 2011 12:50 pm
LadySpark says...



Anything in my portfolio...
hush, my sweet
these tornadoes are for you


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