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Mon Feb 08, 2010 5:20 am
Jas says...



Hey there,


I will review ANYTHING!! ANYTHING!!! Really! All reviews will be at least 1000 words. I really want to be top reviwer or number one on the leaderboards this month so pack on the reviews. They'll all be done within one day! I normally don't do grammar, I focus on advice and plot discussion but if you donate a minimum of 50 points I'll do grammar too. :) It's a win-win situation, you get great advice reviews for free or advice + grammar reviews for 50 points and your helping the poor and I get to touch up my critiquing skills and be NUMERO UNO on the leaderboards :) ~ELEPHANT~ :elephant:


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**please do not put graphic sex scenes though...I'm only 13**
Last edited by Jas on Thu Feb 11, 2010 4:14 am, edited 2 times in total.
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~





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Mon Feb 08, 2010 8:28 pm
foxfire says...



Jasmine! Can you review this for me please?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic58478.html

this is for a contest and wonder if you can review it?
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 8:31 pm
AquaMarine says...



jasminebells wrote:**please do not put graphic sex scenes though...I'm only 13**


You might want to put that a little bigger to ensure that people see it. Otherwise they might just skip over it and offer you an X rated story.

I don't have anything at the moment, but I might ask when I do!
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 10:14 pm
KanenRenoir says...



I could use a review right now.

topic58466.html
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Tue Feb 09, 2010 1:22 am
Jas says...



@renoir,

I have only just saw this and will be doing the review now :)

@Fox,

I wrote on your story the reason why I can't review it because it would help you and give you too much of advantage over the other writers in my contest :) After the contest is over I PROMISE that I'll review your story on envy
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~





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Tue Feb 09, 2010 11:12 pm
romance otaku says...



Hey ^-^. Would you mind reviewing the prologue for my novel, When the Sky Bleeds? It would also be really cool if you could read over the rest too... but that isn't on YWS, so you won't get a review point...

But, either way, here's the link: topic58506.html

Thanks in advance,
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Wed Feb 10, 2010 1:58 am
Rascalover says...



Can you please review a chapter from my romantic fiction piece

topic58540.html

Tiffany,
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Who needs a review? :) http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic38078.html





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Wed Feb 10, 2010 8:11 pm
BenFranks says...



Mind taking a look at this? topic58584.html

Thanks! :D





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Thu Feb 11, 2010 3:40 am
Jas says...



TO ALL: Im sorry but I havent checked this in a while so I didnt realize so many people asked. I'll do them all now

To Renoir: IM SOOOOO SORRY!! Ive done your review about 5 times but each time I pressed submit, the snow decides to spaz up my internet and it gets deleted!! IM SOOOOOO SORRY! :) I'll do it now and save it :)
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~





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Fri Feb 12, 2010 9:42 pm
Jas says...



K guys, I've done all of them so far, anyone else want a review?!?
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~





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Sun Feb 14, 2010 5:20 am
Jas says...



Aww. No one wants a review?
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~





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Tue Feb 16, 2010 7:43 am
ColdZero says...



Hey!

Would you care to review my Fantasy story called the Wandering Elves? I've posted the link below.
-http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic58728.html

Thanks in advance :)
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Sun Feb 21, 2010 6:30 pm
bubblegum says...



If you want, you can review my script?
I'm still kind of new when it comes to writing scripts, though.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic59141.html
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Mon Feb 22, 2010 3:08 am
Jas says...



Sure, but I have to do it tomorrow...:( sorry! :)
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~





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Tue Feb 23, 2010 2:17 am
KanenRenoir says...



I've redrafted my story and was wondering if you could check it out. Here's a link to the first part, but if you can, I was wondering if you'd also check out the second.
viewtopic.php?t=58817

Thanks
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