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Tue Dec 29, 2009 4:49 pm
Xirenia says...



Hi all :D I'm here to review.

Okay, here is what I'm willing and not willing to review:

Will review
Romantic fiction
Other fiction
Fantasy fiction
Dramatic poetry
Other poetry
Historical fiction (I especially enjoy 1700's romance and WWII anything)
Art/Photography
Essays
Non-fiction

Won't review (Sorry...)
Any other kind of poetry (I'll have no idea what I'm talking about)
Action/Adventure fiction (Ditto)

Might review
Fanfiction
Science-fiction
Scripts
Lyrics

My critique style isn't harsh, but I will question aspects of your work. It'll all be for the greater good in the end. That said, I'm the type of reviewer that will write about what I did like as much as what I didn't.
When I critique I'll do nitpicks then a couple paragraphs on different things depending on what the work requires. It could be any or all of these: Fluidity, vocabulary, correct word usage, structure, imagery, showing vs. telling, description, emotion, and believability. There's a lot :wink: . However, my specialty is character realism, and helping to eradicate the all too common occurrence of paper-thin characters. Just let me know what you'd like me to focus on :)
I thought I'd also mention that I do review R rated works. I can take it :)

An example of a request:

Bird Story - The Story of a Bird (Chapter 112)
The link
Other fiction
I think my one and only character may be problematic because he can't speak. He's a bird.
Any extra info you think I might need

Hit me with your best shot :D
Last edited by Xirenia on Wed Jan 06, 2010 12:39 pm, edited 9 times in total.
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Thu Dec 31, 2009 7:16 am
empressoftheuniverse says...



Could I get a rain check on this? I'm going to edit my nanonovel and post it after its readable. It's about forty thousand words right now; it may be more when I'm done. Romantic Fiction, I suppose. If you don't want to review something that massive, I understand completely.
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Thu Dec 31, 2009 3:24 pm
Young gun says...



topic56116.html
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Thu Dec 31, 2009 7:30 pm
Xirenia says...



I'll get right on it, Gun :)

EDIT: Done :)
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Sat Jan 02, 2010 9:57 pm
empressoftheuniverse says...



I know you don't do any other kind of poetry but... It's my first poem and I didn't know where to place it, so I put it in other. Maybe it is a dramatic poem, I don't know.

Anyways...
Full Moon Flapjacks
viewtopic.php?t=56449
other poetry
PLEASE REVIEW
I have to say I'm kinda proud of it... :smt001
Thanks a billion and two
*****The Universe*****
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Sun Jan 03, 2010 8:26 am
Xirenia says...



It'll be done as soon as possible, Empress :)

EDIT: Done :D
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Wed Jan 06, 2010 9:26 am
empressoftheuniverse says...



another one in Lyrical Poetry (don't tell me you won't know what you're talking about. You rock.)
called Ode to Snoink (We are)
topic56627.html
You are the best reviewer ever. EVER.
ps. In full moon flapjacks- i was being sarcastic, i suppose, or sadistic for thinking happiness to be common and worthless. :smt001
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Wed Jan 06, 2010 9:47 am
Xirenia says...



Thanks for that comment Empress, but I doubt I'm the best reviewer ever :wink: Anyway, on your next one =]

EDIT: Done :smt003
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Tue Jan 19, 2010 9:43 pm
*coco says...



Hey, could you please check out my story when you're not too busy, I know it's quite long but I'd love to hear what you think of it so far. Here are the links:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53716.html (chapter 1)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53746.html (chapter 2)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53800.html (chapter 3)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53888.html (chapter 4)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic54024.html (chapter 5)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic54589.html (chapter 6)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic55095.html (chapter 7)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic56650.html chapter 8

Thanks so much!
*coco
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Wed Jan 20, 2010 1:17 am
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Kaywiia says...



I know you have a lot to review, and I would be much obliged if you could review this:

Silver Blade Chapter Two
topic57296.html
Fantasy Fiction
This is the second chapter, but I think you can go without reading the chapter before it. If you want to, follow the link!
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Wed Jan 20, 2010 4:30 am
Jas says...



Hi, would you mind reviewing this?

Ignorance is Never Bliss

No kind words, no harsh words, just honest truth.

Thanks! :)


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apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Fri Jan 22, 2010 6:32 pm
JSPike says...



Hey, do you mind reviewing my poem?

Carpe Diem (We will not be forgotten)

Thanks.

Oh, and harsh reviews are welcome! :D
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Mon Jan 25, 2010 5:29 pm
Xirenia says...



Hey all :) Sorry, I've been so busy with school, but I'll get on those right away :)

Kaywiia - DONE
JSpike - DONE
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Mon Jan 25, 2010 8:00 pm
BenFranks says...



Hey there!
Do you like humour? If you do could you do me a favour and give us a quick down review of these two column-based pieces?
topic57357.html - It's a Disaster. (Non-fiction)
topic57293.html - The Problem With it is. (Non-fiction)
They're fairly short I promise!
Cheers :)
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Fri Jun 16, 2023 11:34 am
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