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Mon Sep 26, 2011 6:50 pm
Jas says...



Hey Lauren!

Can I ask for a review on topic88026.html <--- that?


It's the latest chapter in TSBI and I'd really like your feedback. Thanks!

~Jas
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but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~




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Tue Oct 11, 2011 2:10 am
kendallelise says...



hello! I've been looking through the forums and your reviews are popping up everywhere! :) I would love love love if you could possibly critique my poem? :) I'm new to YWS, but am having so much fun, already! I've always enjoyed writing poetry/short stories, but now I have a place to become a better writer and improve my prose. I'd adore some good feedback!!! :)

this is it

thanks!




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Tue Oct 11, 2011 3:48 pm
Lauren2010 says...



Got ya Jas ;)

I'll get to your poem as soon as I can kendallelise!
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Tue Oct 11, 2011 5:29 pm
peanut19 says...



topic88771.html
Please? <3
~peanut~
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~And The Light Fades


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Wed Oct 12, 2011 11:35 am
polinkacreations says...



Hey Lauren:)
Could I ask you for a review of my novel? I am still in the process of writing it, so for now, I only have 4 chapters (but there are deifinitely more to come)!
It's a fantasy story. But I won't ruin it for you:D
Here it is: novel.php?id=1934
Thanks in advance!
polly xx
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Fri Oct 14, 2011 2:23 pm
Lauren2010 says...



Gotcha kendallelise.

The current lineup is:
-peanut19
-polinkacreations

I'll get to you two as soon as I can! Have a bit of college business to finish up and then I'll have all sorts of time to devote to your reviews. :)
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Wed Nov 02, 2011 2:36 am
Lauren2010 says...



My reviews-waiting list has been cleared!

I'm currently competing in NaNoWriMo, but will get to any requested reviews as soon as I have time (though it may be a tad longer than usual for me to get time to review).
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Wed Nov 02, 2011 2:27 pm
MiaParamore says...



Hey, Lauren! :)

I've never been reviewed by you and it's a shame since you give pretty cool reviews. So would you mind reviewing this?

I know you're NaNo-ing, so no pressure, take your time. :)

Thanks a lot.
"Next time you point a finger
I might have to bend it back
Or break it, break it off
Next time you point a finger
I'll point you to the mirror"

— Paramore




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Wed Nov 02, 2011 5:01 pm
Lauren2010 says...



Sure thing, Mia! I'll get on it as soon as I can :)
"The coroner will find ink in my veins and blood on my typewriter keys."

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Sun Nov 06, 2011 12:13 am
Skins says...



Hey, Lauren!

I know you're good with novel intros and fantasy stuff, so I thought I'd ask you for a review of a fantasy prologue for me. When you get the chance, could you please check out this for me?

It's pretty ew at the moment, to be honest, but hopefully you'll be able to fix that. >.<

Thanks!
Cat.




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Tue Nov 08, 2011 4:53 pm
Gheala says...



Please, do review this piece. It's an excerpt from my romance/crime novel.
post933049.html#p933049
I'm back to my YWS after months of disappearance, hoping that I'd gain the immunity of books and quills against the harmful realism of our world.

In case this made no sense, I'm just saying that I'm happy I'm back!




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Mon Nov 21, 2011 7:51 am
polinkacreations says...



Hey Lauren! I really appreciated your previous reviews, could you take a look at the two new ones posted, pleeeease?
topic90493.html
topic90491.html

Thanks in advance! :)
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Mon Nov 28, 2011 6:02 pm
Lauren2010 says...



For the sake of me remember what's waiting, here's the current line-up:

-Skinsy(though it appears that's been deleted?)
-polinkacreations
"The coroner will find ink in my veins and blood on my typewriter keys."

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Sat Dec 10, 2011 1:45 am
DevanEWilliams says...



I would just love a couple reviews on my most recent two short stories!
viewtopic.php?t=90961
viewtopic.php?t=91104

Thanks so much!
~Devan
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And always have extra marshmallows on hand in case of emergencies.

High Quality Reviews Available Here! viewtopic.php?f=188&t=96280




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Fri Dec 16, 2011 3:02 am
BerlynnRae says...



Would you mind reviewing my novella? Ghost of Theater Two?
Prolouge:
viewtopic.php?t=90746
Chapter one:
viewtopic.php?t=90955
I haven't had time to post the next chapters yet. Thanks so much! ~Berlynn Rae