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Tue Jan 03, 2012 3:23 pm
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Lauren2010 says...



On it folks!

The current line-up:
-DevanEWilliams
-BerlynnRae
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Wed Jan 18, 2012 6:20 pm
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Dragongirl says...



Hello Lauren,

I was wondering if you could check out my novel 'Hook'. You don't have to review the first chapter because it has already been reveiwed pretty well. (though if you notice any glaring errors feel free to point them out.) However, if you could review the second chapter that would be great.

I'm giving you a link to the first chapter because you won't really get the second one unless you at least skim over the first.

viewtopic.php?f=359&t=88271

The link to the second chapter is at the end of the first.

Thank you so much, you are amazing!!!
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Thu Jan 19, 2012 2:52 pm
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I'll get to it as soon as I can, Dragongirl! :)
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Sun Jan 22, 2012 6:27 pm
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Blues says...



*Rings Bell*

Hello? Anyone in here?

I shall slip a quick note on the desk: viewtopic.php?f=359&t=85431

It's an action/adventure novel which I'm rewriting at the moment. It's my second novel and the first to rewrite so I'd like guidance on how to improve :) Thanks, Lauren! I'll be glad to review something in return if you wish.

(Also, there are links at the end of every chapter for the next one :) )




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Tue Jan 31, 2012 4:14 am
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Lauren2010 says...



Gotcha Dragongirl, and I'm working my way through Ahmad's novel. :)

Feel free to drop more requests! I'm always eager to review :3
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Tue Jan 31, 2012 8:28 pm
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Emmzziee says...



Hola!
My poem is in desperate need. Please help it. :) I'll review something for you too if you like. work.php?id=93024&sid=dcd8390befd342cb73d69f7103a78d23#comments
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Wed Feb 01, 2012 2:20 am
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Sureal says...



Rawr, hello you. Don't worry too much if you don't have the time, but I'd certainly appreciate some feedback on the opening chapter of my long short story 'Foxes'.

Been browsing the WRFF forum, and you seem to be a) a prolific reviewer, and b) a good reviewer, so yeah, coming to you. =P And because I believe in returning the favour, I'll of course review something of yours in return (preferably prose - I'm borderline useless with poetry).

Foxes - One can be found at: work.php?id=93102
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Thu Feb 02, 2012 2:21 am
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Jitterbug says...



Good Eventide, Lauren! It's Jitterbug. Whenever you get some free time, I was wondering if you'd be willing to give a review on the first part of my fantasy novel, Pathway, which is 54 pages in length. I definitely know I can make the story better than what it is, and with your feedback, I hope to get an idea of what changes will be necessary. No pressure though. Only if you have the time.
Oh, and by the way, I found out that if you search your history of posts, and if any of them were done in the Novel Workshop, a link to the Novel Workshop shows up to the left of your post. So yes, everything from the workshop is still there, including Eventide and skinsy's book, Stop and Stare.
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Fri Feb 03, 2012 11:17 pm
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Lauren2010 says...



Okay here's the line-up!
-AhmadBlues
-Emmzziee
-Sureal
-Jitterbug

Also, Jitterbug, thanks for the tips! I was wondering about that, actually. And I'm sure eventually Nate will get around to putting it someplace accessible on the new site as well.
Last edited by Lauren2010 on Sat Feb 04, 2012 9:32 pm, edited 3 times in total.
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Sat Feb 04, 2012 5:07 pm
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tinkembell says...



Hi! I'd love it if you could review my novel Spark. I really need a review on chapter two, but it'd be amazing if you could review the first chapter too. Anyway, here it is:
(chapter one part one)
work.php?id=91399
(chapter one part two)
work.php?id=91618
(chapter two part one)
work.php?id=93021
Again, you don't have to do chapter one if you don't want to :3.
Thank you!
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Sat Feb 04, 2012 7:27 pm
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Sure think, Tink!

The current line-up:
-Emmzziee
-Sureal
-Jitterbug
-tinkembell

Note: I'll still take requests, but keep in mind it may take me a while to get to it! :)
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Mon Feb 13, 2012 5:56 am
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ahhhsmusch says...



Hello, I would greatly appreciate a review. :)

work.php?id=93385




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Tue Feb 28, 2012 6:02 pm
Lauren2010 says...



Just for everyone's information, I'm definitely going to get through the rest of my to-review list next week while I'm off from school for break :3
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 11:31 pm
Firearris says...



Please? c: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=93733
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[Firearris] 10:45 pm: askes the guard for the weasel!
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Thu Mar 01, 2012 11:43 pm
psudiname says...



could you review the first two parts of my short story? it will probably have about ten parts because all I know how to write are novels, and you said you liked following novels, so we seem like the perfect match!
links are here work.php?id=93605
and here work.php?id=93759
if anyone wants a review, post on my profile and I'll get to it in a couple days.