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Fri Jan 08, 2010 8:13 am
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empressoftheuniverse says...



thank you day dream. Awesome story idea, can't wait to see what happens. :)
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Fri Jan 08, 2010 10:53 am
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thank for reviewing appreciate it!W

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Sat Jan 09, 2010 3:54 am
pinkangel54123 says...



Please?
Luna 1.0
It's Fantasy Fiction
Any advice you give I'll take gladly.
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Sat Jan 09, 2010 1:12 pm
BenFranks says...



Ullo! :)

I was wondering if you'd mind reviewing the start to my new novel?
Here's the link:
Chapter 1 & Prologue: topic56745.html
Chapter 2: topic56820.html

I was wondering if you could post a rating for the plot with your review? Thanks a million!

[P.S - Rated 16+ for language...]

Ben :)





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Sat Jan 09, 2010 9:20 pm
empressoftheuniverse says...



finished, pink angel. And ben-- I'm on it.
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Mon Jan 11, 2010 1:54 am
empressoftheuniverse says...



Ben-- chapter one and prologue done. Still working on chapter two.
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Tue Jan 12, 2010 1:28 am
pudin.junidf says...



Empress, hey!
Could you please review this for me?
Is called a demon sits behind me at school.
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Thu Jan 14, 2010 8:19 am
Maddy says...



Sparrowhawk Soar (an excerpt, 3/4 the way through)
post644561.htm
Fantasy Fiction
The word count of the excerpt is 1,329
Could you please tell me if the flow of the sentences makes sense and is easy to follow?
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Fri Jun 16, 2023 11:40 am
DreamyAlice says...



Hello, I am one of the res crew mods here on YWS. This is a message just to inform you that I will lock and archive this thread as it is not active anymore. We have to archive and lock the inactive threads to keep the forum organized so no worries if you'd like to reopen it at any point in the future please contact a current resources moderator, we would be happy to reopen it for you ^-^

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