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Sun Oct 04, 2009 10:48 pm
Kamas says...



Hi everyone!
Critique's for everyone! One and all!

What I critique:

All poetry
(Narrative, Dramatic, Lyrics and Other)
Artwork and Photography
Other
(most things)


What I do not critique:

Long stories/novels
Lyrics
(most of the time)
Advance Critiques
Essays
Stories ( unless they're really short. Or you just want my opinion)

What I'd like you to tell me when requesting:

A link
The genre
Whether you are seeking a long detail critique or just a few suggestions.

One thing I ask you not to do:

Give me over 3 links at a time. Please. I will be less likely to review them.


Bring 'em on! :D

Kamas

EDIT!

Eh Whatever. Just give me anything.(Except long stories please, they're quite a torturous business)
I'll try to give you the best review I can.

-Kamas
Last edited by Kamas on Tue Jan 19, 2010 2:43 am, edited 3 times in total.
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Mon Oct 05, 2009 9:40 pm
pudin.junidf says...



Hello!!

was wondering if you could review this poem? Is Narrative poetry and the name is War Wind

viewtopic.php?t=53456

Thanks for the help
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.

Verlaine





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Tue Oct 06, 2009 4:36 am
empressoftheuniverse says...



Hello! I have a short story for you to critique called Scarecrow


http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=53343
It's in other fiction; about fifteen hundred to two thousand words.

How do people do that cool thing where they write Here
and a url springs out of the word??
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Tue Oct 06, 2009 11:08 pm
Kamas says...



Done.
Last edited by Kamas on Mon Oct 19, 2009 11:14 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Mon Oct 19, 2009 11:16 pm
Kamas says...



No one? Aw *broken heart*
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Sat Oct 24, 2009 10:35 pm
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pudin.junidf says...



Hey Kammie!!

me here, again.

could you plase check this out?
It's called Bye for Now.
post615795.html#p615795

Thanks so much for your help
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.

Verlaine





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Sun Oct 25, 2009 5:21 pm
Kamas says...



Done Pudin :)
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Sun Oct 25, 2009 6:01 pm
Young gun says...



It would be really nice if you could give your comments on this one.Its in romantic fiction genre.

topic53783.html

Thanks.
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Sun Oct 25, 2009 9:54 pm
Kamas says...



Done Young.

I'm on a rollll.
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Sun Oct 25, 2009 10:48 pm
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Mage_Banks says...



I liked that! I am like blowed away by the talent you have. Its good that you can coptulvate the talent of writimg that way! Im currently working a piece to put here and I just got inspired by your work to contine my story. Thanks for the inspiration and keep up the good work!





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Mon Oct 26, 2009 3:13 am
Kamas says...



I'm confused what did I do?

xD
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Wed Nov 18, 2009 4:51 am
Kamas says...



Nothing? Quite disappointing.
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Fri Nov 20, 2009 1:51 pm
MissMiaFacinelli says...



Hi! So, I reviewed your piece, and was wondering if you would like to read mine, and add a couple of suggestions on characters, flow, etc.

It's called Luminescence, and is in eight parts, and still not finished! It is a Twilight fanfic, and I hope that that's OK!

Here is the link to part one:

Part One

So, yeah. Just what I suggested above really. If you really are wild about it, or need something to do, check out the next parts, and maybe even read the whole thing!

Thanks!

Mia x
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Sat Nov 21, 2009 12:58 am
Fruits_Basket99Tohru says...



Hi Kamas! I was wondering if you could review my 1st story for me. I'd quite like some more reviews on it (there are only 2 right now!)

So here is the link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic54552.html
It's under FanFiction; and it doesn't matter what kind of review you give. I would prefer, however, to have a nice long review. :) This is my 1st story, after all! :D

OK, thank you so much! Bye for now! xD
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Sat Nov 21, 2009 3:57 pm
Kamas says...



Mia>> Done

Fruits>> It'll be done when I get back from swimming
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