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Mon Feb 09, 2009 4:18 am
Hannah says...



Closed for now, please!

Spoiler! :
^_^ Hello! I'm Hannah! It's a pleasure to meet you, and I'm sure we'll be seeing a lot more of each other now that we're acquainted. I'm 18, and all my life I've wanted to be a writer. Well, I know I'm not there yet, because as someone once said, "You're not a real writer until you've gotten your first rejection letter".

Anywhoodles! You're not here to hear my life story, are you? Let's get down to it then. C:

Will Review {and be quite good at};

* Poetry
* Action/Adventure Fiction
* Fantasy Fiction
* Romantic Fiction
* Other Fiction

Will Review {and be relatively good at};

* Historical Fiction {though I can't check facts specifically}
* Science Fiction {some of it might be lost on me, though I enjoy reading it!}
* Lyrics

Will Review {and be okay at};

* Scripts {I don't have much experience with scripts!}
* Non-Fiction {can't check facts, mostly structure}

Will NOT Review;

* Fan-Fiction
* Art and Photography

Got it? Good. Really, I'm willing to try my hand at critiquing anything! I mean, I'm not an expert on poetry or historical fiction, but I can still read and comprehend plots, imagery, and characters! ^_^

How I Will Review;

So, what can you expect with a review from me? Well, let's see.
Sometimes, especially with poetry, I might slip into focusing on the structure, like I did here.

Sometimes I focus on the tone of the piece and how specific words or phrases detract or add to the work, like I did here.

A lot of times I'll tell you to clarify things in the story or to take out explanations you don't even need, like I did here.

Sometimes the reviews are long, and sometimes they're short.

Really, I don't have a set way of reviewing -- you'll get what comes to my mind when I'm reading. IF, however, there is an element of your work that you want me to look at specifically, please just let me know and I'll do my best to oblige! ^_^

Also, don't feel ashamed to post anything rated R! A lot of my works are rated R and I know I question whether or not to ask for a review, but you shouldn't worry about that -- I am prepared to handle anything you might have posted. C:

I don't require anything in return, but it would be nice if you might respond through PM whether my critique was helpful or not. ^_^

Heummm, and of course I'll try to get every review done as quickly as possible. If it looks like I abandoned the thread {accidentally}, feel free to poke me through my guest book or PM to get back here.

=] Oh, now here are the rules on how to ask for a review!

1. Please ask for one review at a time. If I finish reviewing one of your pieces, you can come back and ask about another, but please wait until I have finished your first!
2. Should you ask for a review on a piece that is part of a series and not the beginning of that series, please let me know what went on before or you'll have a very flustered Hannah on your hands!
3. Please post the name of your work, the genre of your work, and the link to your work when requesting a review. Be sure to include anything specific you want me to work on AND if there's anything special I should know before plunging in.

Well, I suppose that's about it. ^_^;; Happy posting, everyone~ <3

-Hannah-

In Queue;

Kingdom of Gold: Chapter One (2) by Shina


Completed Critiques;

Life by Camille
Shepherd's Lamb (working title) by Maki-Chan
Cashmoney by XxxDo
For The Girls: Chapter One by Moriah Leila
The Childhood of Mr. O'Connor by Anti-pop
Pride by RGallagher
Books for Boys by asxz
Memoir; Networking by Serendipity Blues
Purple Magic by LydiaB
The Legend of Leo by Lorens_01
Beast by JayandKay
Sentient by mizz-iceberg
The End of Time: Chapter One, Part One by Bickazer
Time Goes On by Nimphal
Book of Raziel ; Prologue by Tuna
An Unfulfilled Desire by Palip
Death's Sunset by Rosey
Let Me Leave with Spectrum Shades by Evi
Kingdom of Gold: Chapter One by Shina
Heaving Ardor by bailecielo
Fantasist by Zanna
Wyndolyn by Dakota
Last edited by Hannah on Sun Mar 14, 2010 6:24 am, edited 18 times in total.





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Mon Feb 09, 2009 11:38 pm
Wolf says...



Hey!
I'd really appreciate a review on this as it is a school project and I'll have to hand it in soon ...
topic43477.html
Title: Life (generic, I know, but my teacher chose it.)
Genre: Other Poetry

Thanks :) If there's anything of yours that hasn't already received a bunch of reviews, I'd be happy to critique it for you.
Cheers,
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Would you like a review?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic73903.html





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Sat Feb 14, 2009 12:58 am
Maki-Chan says...



How about topic43618.html

here is a little bit about it!

A childish girl who lives in a childish illusion that the world is loving and death doesn't exist. However, when she moves in with her stepmother everything will change. Simply meaning that a man comes along and bursts her bubble. Come and read the horrifying and disturbing horror/comedy about a girl and her neighbor, a homicidal mass murdering maniac!

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Wed Feb 18, 2009 4:50 pm
Moriah Leila says...



Title: Untitled Chapter One (I could use any suggestions you might have for this)
Genre: Other Fiction
Link: post505446.html#505446

As always I will return the favor and review any of your works that you specifically need a review on. You can PM me the link or post it in my review post in this forum. I apologize I don't have that link here. Thanks for your input!
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Thu Feb 19, 2009 6:17 am
anti-pop says...



Hiya, Hannah-Banana!
Mind giving this a review?
The Childhood of Mr. O'Connor
Other Fiction
Can't think of anything specific I would like, really.

Thank you so much! ^^


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Sat Feb 21, 2009 2:10 am
Hannah says...



Sorry, loves. Real life is completely taking me over right now, but I WILL get to your reviews as soon as possible. I'm sure I'll have some free time this weekend. My apologies. <3
you can message me with anything: questions, review requests, rants
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Mon Mar 02, 2009 12:55 am
Hannah says...



=D I'm all caught up and quite ready for some more writing to review! Post, post, post! ^_^





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Mon Mar 02, 2009 1:25 am
RGallagher says...



Hey Hannah! I love your name! One of my purely awesome friends is named Hannah too! And yes, I am babbling for no point. :D

Here's the info for me stuffs that I'd like a critique on.
Title: Pride
Genre: Other Fiction
Summary: A man comes home from the military
Link: topic44545.html

Spanku berry much!
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Need a critique? Post here!
topic42126.html





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Mon Mar 02, 2009 6:06 am
asxz says...



Hi, Could you please review this for me?
Name: Books for boys... (Title of the competition actually!)
Genre: Adventure fiction
Summery: Man flees from police
Link: Posted above!
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Mon Mar 02, 2009 12:13 pm
Serendipity Blues says...



Heyyyy; could you perhaps review my piece of none fiction?

Thanks in advance! If you ever need a review, just ask!
Fancy a Review?

Moo.





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Mon Mar 02, 2009 4:28 pm
LydiaB says...



Hey, would you mind reviewing this for me? It is a sequel, but all of the characters except for two (who won't appear until much later) died at least 100 years ago. No need to worry about them :D

topic44570.html

It's definitely fantasy, and I hope you like it! I'll be more than willing to review anything of yours if you want me to!
-Lydia <3
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Purple Magic
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Sat Mar 07, 2009 5:51 pm
Hannah says...



There we go -- all caught up again! ^_^ Feel free to post more! =D





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Sat May 09, 2009 2:57 pm
Lorens_01 says...



Hi Ma'am or Miss Hannah! I'm kinda nervous to ask you to review my work since I am new, and I would be more than honored if you would grace your presence at my work and tear it to pieces to make the most effective critique you could possibly throw at me. Thank you very much! =)

Title: The Legend of Leo
Genre: Fantasy Fiction
Summary: The search for the twelve stars of the zodiac is at hand!
Link: topic47393.html
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Sat May 09, 2009 11:04 pm
JayandKay says...



Title: Beast
Genre: Other Fiction
Things you should know: It's a bit graphic and fairly experimental in nature.

Thanks!
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