Title: Sentient -Part One
Link:http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic47883.html
Genre: Other Fiction
This is part one to a story of three parts. I will eventually post the other parts. If you could please have look at it and and give me an in depth review as well as a critique, I would be very grateful. Some of the things I'm worried about include the style and tone. I've used a style in this story that I usually don't usually use. I'm concerned that I've done too much telling and that some parts may be too repetitive. Does my story grasp the reader's attention? Is it interesting? It is boring?
And nitpicks would be helpful too. also, if you notice anything else that could be improved upon, please let me know.
Thank you so much!
-Zehra
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