Could you please review this for me? It's the third chapter of a supernatural novel I'm working on. You don't need to review the first two, though if you want this to make more sense you may want to at least skim through them. Otherwise I'm just looking for what you think about my writing style, and nitpicks, and characters and such. Thanks in advance.
Hey Evi!
I was hoping you could check out my "Which Path to Take?" contest entry. It's Fantasy Fiction (I'm not sure if you read Fantasy, if not you can delete my post), PG and called Wyndolyn. I wanted to get some reviews on it to spiff it up some before the contest (on the 15th). I hope you don't die of boredom reading it LOL.
~Dakota
Can you please review my story here? It's in the fantasy fiction forum.
It's for a contest, so I just want a review so that if there are faults, I can edit them before the contest deadline.
Camp's over! =D So, my thread can now resurrect from the depths of this forum and proceed to better the literary world with constructive criticism and insightful input!
In other words: bump.
"Let's eat, Grandma!" as opposed to "Let's eat Grandma!": punctuation saves lives.
When we are children we seldom think of the future. This innocence leaves us free to enjoy ourselves as few adults can. The day we fret about the future is the day we leave our childhood behind. — Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind
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