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Thu Jan 08, 2009 6:21 pm
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Lost_in_dreamland says...



Okay; I'm unsure as to whether to carry on with this piece, it just randomly came to me the other night. It's in Other fiction:
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it's very short, only around 400 words. xD
for what are we without words and stories?




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Sun Jan 11, 2009 1:29 am
luverly says...



post482240.html#482240

It's in Fantasy Fiction and I don't have a title yet, which is why it's called 'Indunian Story'.


It's a prolouge to a larger story I'm still working on. It's pretty short and I just posted an edited version.




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Mon Jan 12, 2009 10:08 pm
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Lord Anzius says...



I'll just bother you with my totally useless story

About a guy in England (close to London) who has just moved into a mansion (Oh and it's a few years after the second world war) There he meets a gnome called Mike, in this chapter he decides to go and buy groceries.

Name: The mansion chapter 3 (Dust an' Products)
genre:other fiction

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35811.html
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Mon Jan 12, 2009 10:10 pm
Firestarter says...



Apologies if any recently requested critiques are slow on the ground, I have a very busy two weeks.
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Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:11 am
Jiggity says...



Still alive and active?
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Sun Feb 22, 2009 1:23 am
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Threnody says...



You seem busy. But could you please, pretty please review my very short prologue?

post511481.html#511481

It's called the Piper Legend

Thanks so so much.

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Wed Mar 04, 2009 10:45 am
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threm. says...



topic44643.html

I'm kind of afraid on showing you this. hahaha!

-threm. It's fantasy, i hope it's okay. thanks yo.
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Thu Mar 26, 2009 12:14 pm
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I'll catch up on the above 4 and then I'll be open again! Sorry. I have been lax.
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Mon Apr 27, 2009 5:43 am
asxz says...



Hi! Could you please review?

[url=http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post549255.html#549255]
The tree of terror. [/url]It's part of a story I'm writing, but I have a brief overview at the begining of the piece. it's in action/advent Fiction, and it's about 3 1/2 pages in MS word... sorry! You can take a few days though... I don't really mind!
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Tue Apr 28, 2009 6:32 pm
peanutgallery007 says...



1. http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic46037.html

2. Peanutgallery's NaPoWriMo thread

3. Just my collection of poetry for the month... some of them are really good, I think, and some are pretty pathetic, but I would like a critique!

No rush. :)
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Try your hand at my poetry contest!

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Sun Jan 10, 2010 6:56 pm
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Firestarter says...



And we're back in business!

After Tuesday, I should have time to spend on reviewing. Same general rules apply as on the first page. Hit me up, kiddos!
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Tue Jan 12, 2010 1:27 am
pudin.junidf says...



Hey Jack!

Can you review this for me please?
IS called A demon sits behind me at school
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.

Verlaine




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Tue Jan 12, 2010 2:31 pm
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Firestarter says...



Done!
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Wed Jan 13, 2010 11:35 am
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cosby says...



Please could review the second chapter of my story please? (You may want to read the Prologue and Chapter One first!)

Dark Tide - Chapter Two

Thank you!
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Sun Jan 17, 2010 8:46 pm
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Hey cosby, sorry for the slow response. I should get it done over the next day or two; if not, send me a reminder PM.
How young are you?
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