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Wed Mar 04, 2009 6:23 pm
asxz says...



Okay... could you please review this for me... there isa prologue, but it doesn't have to be read. Thank you!
Title: S.P. 1.1 / S.P.1.2
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Rating: Zilch
link: Part 1 & Part 2

Thank you immensly!
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Mon Mar 16, 2009 11:32 pm
canislupis says...



Sure! You should see the first one up soon. :)




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Thu Jul 02, 2009 1:15 am
LordLoredaen says...



Um.... what if I don't have any food?
Am fear nach gleidh na h-airm san t-sith, cha bhi iad aige 'n am a' chogaidh.

* He that keeps not his arms in time of peace will have none in time of war.


(This pretty much means "If you want peace, be prepared for war")




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Sun May 16, 2010 10:46 pm
canislupis says...



I can't believe the last post was almost a year ago!

I need more stuff to read, people!

* resurrects thread *




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Mon May 17, 2010 1:04 pm
MiaParamore says...



Hi there canislupis. I would love a review on my romantic short-story,Love has No boundaries(I). Thanks for the review in advance and can you take a special look on the dialogue and sentence construction because I'm still a bit weak in those areas. `
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Mon May 17, 2010 4:22 pm
canislupis says...



Done!

Any other takers?




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Tue May 18, 2010 2:03 am
Kyllorac says...



Would you please review Chapter 3 of The Fox and the Prince? There's nothing in particular I'd like you to focus on, so critique away.
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Wed May 19, 2010 2:55 am
canislupis says...



And.... Done!

Again, I'm open for business!




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Fri May 21, 2010 10:01 pm
JackpotJohnson says...



Sneak Peek of: The Yangziat System Mission
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:D Thanks that would be great
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Wed May 26, 2010 3:51 pm
canislupis says...



Finished! Sorry I couldn't be more helpful--fanfiction isn't really my thing. ;)

Next?




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Wed May 26, 2010 10:06 pm
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Attolia says...



Hey, Canislupis. I like your reviews. I often find myself reviewing a piece after you and agreeing with almost everything you said. So I'd love to get your thoughts on something of mine. The novel I'm working on right now - you can find the prologue through chapter two in my portfolio - is most important to me (if you critique that you can just do a very general, broad review on all I have so far as a whole), but I also just wrote a short story in Historical Fiction Short Stories that needs reviews. So it's up to you, whichever you want to critique; I'd love your thoughts on either. :)
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Thu May 27, 2010 8:35 pm
Skins says...



Heya :)

Will you review some homework of mine please? I want to get it up to a decent standard because of the fact that it is homework. Right now, it's lacking. It's a monologue and it's pretty short, just in case you wanted to know.

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Thanks in advance!

xoxo Rhian
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Fri May 28, 2010 6:02 pm
canislupis says...



Skins, yours is done. Hope it helped a bit. :)

Attolia, yours should be done soon.

-Lupis




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Sat May 29, 2010 10:02 pm
canislupis says...



Attolia, most of yours are done as well. I'm more than halfway to my goal of one hundred reviews before June 20!

Anyone else?




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Sun May 30, 2010 4:41 am
Rascalover says...



Can you review apart of my romantic novel please and thank you ? :)
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