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Thu Dec 18, 2008 4:24 am
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canislupis says...



Welcome to Critiques by Canislupis!

Doesn't that sound like the name of an over-priced clothing store? Anyway.

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Done looking? Now ask for a review!

My critiques are free, and I generally go through briefly, looking for typos, etc. Then I give overall comments with what I think can be approved. If you have something in particular for me to evaluate, please ask.

Here's what I like to review:

General Fiction/Other fiction
Fantasy fiction
(PLEASE no vampires unless you're a really, really good writer and have never read Stephanie Meyer. I don't like fantasy war stories much either, unless they're the medieval type)
Historical fiction
Action/Adventure fiction
(Again, don't like war stories much)
Art/photography (Don't expect anything in depth)


I will, but prefer not to review:

Romantic fiction (Especially if it has vampires in it :roll: )
Science fiction (nothing Star-trekky, but futuristic stuff is ok)

I will not review:

Fanfiction
Non fiction
Poetry (I can try, but I know nothing--go elsewhere. :D)
Scripts (See poetry)


I'd prefer short stories, but I don't mind critiquing novels as long as it's not "chapter 35 part one of 7" or something like that.

I love Historical fiction and anything to do with nature/survival/ wild animals.

Please give me about a week to give you your review, at which time if I have not responded, feel free to PM me or remind me here. I'll try to get to you as soon as possible.

[Edit]Please note that I frequently have eight+ reviews pending, mostly requested via PM (which is harder to keep track of) so if I don't respond right away, that's probably why. If it's been a week, ask again.


Thanks!

~Lupis
Last edited by canislupis on Sun Feb 12, 2012 6:43 pm, edited 12 times in total.
  





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Thu Dec 18, 2008 4:46 am
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anti-pop says...



Title: My Dearest Madelyn
Genre: Romance (sorry) :(
Length: Roughly 2,100 words
Look at: I guess just your initial reaction to the piece? I want to know if it's getting the right reaction from my audience.

topic40024.html

Thanks so much!


*anti-pop
...Bitter cold, it grows
changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

-Libretto
  





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Thu Dec 18, 2008 7:53 pm
canislupis says...



I'll get to it as soon as I can!

~Lupis
  





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Fri Dec 19, 2008 2:15 pm
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Lord Anzius says...



Historical fiction:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post470509.html#470509

It is called Ashurbanipal
To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 8:41 pm
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canislupis says...



Done! Thanks for posting.

~Lupis
  





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Sat Dec 20, 2008 2:54 am
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MADD94 says...



hi, they are both realistic fiction with the same main character but not really related.
post470069.html#470069
topic38723.html

its called eight periods in the life
Some people call me the space cowboy
  





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Sat Dec 20, 2008 4:43 am
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canislupis says...



K! I'll get to it as soon as possible!

~Lupis
  





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Sat Dec 20, 2008 6:29 pm
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canislupis says...



ooh... Sorry I couldn't complete those.

Like I said, I'd prefer things that are under PG-13, since, after all, I'm only thirteen. :)
  





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Mon Dec 22, 2008 8:20 pm
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Wolf says...



Hey! :)

I'd really appreciate a review on this: topic39467.html
It's Romance ... sorry. I mean, nothing remotely romantic happens in it, so I don't even know why I rated it that. Silly me.

Thanks! If you want a review in return, check out my thread in this forum.

- Camille <3
everything i loved
became everything i lost.


Would you like a review?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic73903.html
  





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Wed Dec 24, 2008 12:05 am
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canislupis says...



Hey Camille! I'll get to it as soon as I can.

Until then!

~Lupis



[EDIT]Everyone interested in a review:

I will be mostly unavailable through Dec 25, and the day after I will be leaving to go skiing. I will most likely take a few pieces to review while I'm up there, so if you want something reviewed, post it here quickly so I can do it while I'm gone. Anything posted here between now and then will be dealt with as soon as I get back. :)

I'll post this up top as well.
  





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Wed Dec 24, 2008 4:44 pm
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Lost_in_dreamland says...



posting.php
^ Don't worry about how long it takes because it is a long piece, and I am completely willing to donate points for it because it is really long :)
thanks so much and don't worry if you don't do it ;)
-Kirsten xxx
for what are we without words and stories?
  





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Wed Dec 24, 2008 4:46 pm
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Lost_in_dreamland says...



topic40733.html
^ sorry I posted the wrong link, that's the right one :lol:
-x
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Tue Jan 06, 2009 1:18 am
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canislupis says...



Ok! Wolf, yours should be up shortly, and I have Lost_In_Dreamland's piece waiting for me to type up.

Happy New Year!

~lupis
  





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Tue Mar 03, 2009 11:52 pm
canislupis says...



Hey! I'm back now, so I can critique new pieces.
  








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