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Sat Dec 13, 2008 3:39 pm
Rosendorn says...



Welcome to the Garden. Hope the rose thorns don't snag you.

I'll accept absolutely everything except vampire stories. This includes:

- Chapters midway through a novel. Summary does not need to be provided, as I will take the story as is. The review might not be as good as it would be with a summary, though. Here is a good article on writing chapter summaries.

- Fanfiction. Please provide context for the world so I know what in the world is going on. This is barring Legend of Zelda fanfiction because I have a few friends who've thoroughly roped me into the fandom.

Request away.

Although, a word of warning: I can be notoriously slow in responding to requests. Sometimes you'll get a reply immediately, sometimes it'll take a couple of weeks. Just be patient and I'll get to it... eventually.
Last edited by Rosendorn on Mon Jul 27, 2009 7:34 pm, edited 88 times in total.
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 12:20 am
Antigone Cadmus says...



Hi! Could you please review this?

Not too long, I can't deal with an uber-long sentence-by-sentence thing. A bit overwhelming.

Title: Untitled
Genre: Fantasy (werewolves- not Twilight rip-off, don't worry)
Link: topic40098.html

Thank you!
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 12:38 am
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Alright. Just main glaring points then. And a future point- horror is on my "Won't do" list, but I'll make an exception just this once.

Working on it.
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 12:55 am
Jamie_rocks says...



Okay, I just posted this and could use some feedback. No toning down necesarry. :) It's supernatural, you don't have anything about that in your lists,k so I though I'd give you a shot. It's really long though: final word count was 4622, so if it's too long you don't have to do it.

post467874.html#467874

:)
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 1:39 am
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Sakura- done!
Jamie_Rocks- You weren't kidding when you said it was long. I'll look at it soon.
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 1:40 am
Antigone Cadmus says...



Thanks. I'll go read it.
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 6:08 am
Jamie_rocks says...



Okay, like I said though, no pressure and definitely no rush.
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 4:02 pm
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Jamie_Rocks- Done.

Any more?
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 4:59 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



Hey,
I know you're already reading through this but just so that you have a link set in stone...
Broken. topic35287.html < That's where you left off, I think. Just do it at your own leisure. :wink: I'm not fussed.
Thankyou, dahling.

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Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 6:31 pm
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Of course. :P

I'll start working on it again.
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 5:21 pm
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Castles- Done chapter 3.

I have seven more chapters of Broken to go. I am very willing to have more then one thing awaiting a critique.
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Sat Dec 20, 2008 3:07 pm
Twit says...



Title: Scavenger (Chapter One)
Genre: Fantasy/Alternate History
Link: post471223.html#471223

Please be as harsh as poss., and especially on whether it works as a first chapter. Thanks!
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Sat Dec 20, 2008 3:58 pm
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I love alternate history! I'll get right on it.

Castles- I'll get chap. 4 done soon.
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Sat Dec 20, 2008 5:39 pm
Rosendorn says...



TL G-Wooster- Done.
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Wed Dec 24, 2008 8:22 pm
Twit says...



Title: Scavenger 1.1
Genre: Fantasy/Alternate History
Link: topic36822.html

The one that you read was more like a test run, so could you review the actual chapter one, please? Thanks!
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