Hi there! Could you please take a look at this short story I wrote? It's a first draft and I like the bones of it, but know it needs some work! So some feedback would be greatly appreciated:) It's called "Summerfest": work.php?id=101028
If you totally want some meat to eat, you can check out these. They need some thinning. I'll put up the options and you pick what you think looks tasty~
That awkward moment when you jump out a window because your friend jumped out a window, then you remember that your other friend can fly. — Rick Riordan, The Ship of the Dead
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