Young Writers Society

Hi! Because you have entered, it seems you would like a review from me. That's wonderful.


What I'd rather not review:

Fanfiction
Fantasy
Sci-fi
Very long chapters
Multiple chapters - give me one at a time.*

What I'd rather review:

Everything else. But please keep in mind that I can't really go that deep into poems - I'll try my best, but I might not always understand them.


What I focus on while reviewing:

Nit-picks (like grammar, spelling, structure, awkwardly phrased sentences)
Believability etc. (eg. in dialogue)
Overall impression
Rhyme scheme/rhythm (in poetry)
Imagery (in poetry)

What you should do:

Give me the link and genre of the piece you want to be reviewed. If you want, you can say a few words about the piece.


*What you shouldn't do:

Give me more than one piece of yours at a time. (If you do this, I will most likely only review the first one.) After I've reviewed that one, you can ask for more.


Payment:

None. Although, I might like you better if you treated me with some chocolate every now and then.


In queue:

None!


Please note:

I hope you can be patient. I will do what I've promised to do, but sometimes I'm more busy and can't do the review very quickly, especially if there's a queue. Thanks for understanding.



Fire away!

Hey there Demeter, it'd be great if you'd review this for me
it's called Adelaide, a prologue.
And yes, it's ridden with spelling errors and such but I really need overall impressions, it is terrible so it'd be great for some criticism. Thankyou
-Kirsten xxx

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I'd like a review on my poem please. It's called "Two Maidens" and it's a narrative poem about friendship and romance. Also, I do have cookies (although I don't think it's feasible to get them all the way to Finland ).

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post459183.html#459183

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I don't mind you tearing apart, honest.

x

Please review these:


http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34985.html The ripper prologue


Pliide

If you like:

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It's a poem. Nothing special though.

Hi Demeter!
I'm anti-pop. I have a piece I'd like to enter in a contest, but I'd like some feedback before I send it in:
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Oh, and I donate points to those who I ask to review my work, simply because my laptop got a bit upset when I tried to send some homemade cookies via email....I'd rather not talk about it.

Thanks so much!


*anti-pop

romantic fiction: topic40060.html

review please???

Tiff

No queue! This is your chance!

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Could you critique this for me?
It's only 578 words so it wouldn't take long
It'd be so helpful to get some opinions on it
Thanks so much *-)
x

There you go.

Well... Mine is unfortunately long, so you don't have to review if you can't make it through it all. It is an Other Fiction and my first story I have posted and it is only a prologue. I was just wondering if you felt like reading and telling me how to improve on it which I really do need help with.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic40519.html
There you go!
Please and thank you.
~Incognito Temptation

Chapter 1 - topic40209.htmla

Chapter 2 - topic40419.html

It's not much romantic stuff.

It has vampires - does that count as sci fi/fantasy? Sorry...

I would really like chapter 2 reviewed. Chapter 1 is only there if you want to see what has been done so far...?

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It's called 'Watching Mermaids' (just incase I pasted the wrong link!) and it would be great if you would review it, it hasn't had many!

Please take your time though if you have other reviews waiting and I appreciate that it's christmas as well

Thank you!

Sofi.

No queue