Young Writers Society

Feel free to leave a piece for me to poke some holes in. If you can handle the power of the trident, then I'll be happy to take a look.


Please feel free to explain any specifics of which you would like me to pay attention. I am a grammar savant and have a pretty good grasp on sentence structure and overall content. I have less experience with poetry, but will still have a look. Poetic conventions are probably my biggest weakness.

I do not require you to review any of my work, but if you'd like to return the favor, that would be great!

So prepare for a well thought-out critique. Beware to all who are seasick!

Hey Trident!

I just put up a mystery called Murder She Drew and I was wondering if you could take a look at it. Things to look out for:

1) Were you suprised by the murderer
2) Did it all make sense?
3) Did the plot work well?
4) Any line edits you have.

Thanks so much!

Hi! If you could shred Scavenger for me, I'd be really grateful. If you can't do a line by line of each chapter, then an overall would be just as nice.

If I could have specifics on the characters, whether there's anything confusing or not explained very well, whether the M/C's background is clear or confusing or whatever.

Thanks!

Oh, and you have to scroll about halfway down the page to the get to where it properly starts. The first chapter is called "Drych-ddelwedd" and begins with a Gandhi quote.

The Voices are Many would like a stab. ^_^

I would love just any overall impressions, and any advice or criticism you have.

Thank you!

[s]BlackGhost[/s]

Hey Tri! Here's what I'd like a crit on...

As Elaine Lights A Cigarette

It was sort of an experiment? I don't have any specific questions, really...

I would love for you to completely rip apart my story Forget Myself. Focussing on how it's written rather than the plot itself, but, any suggestions you could make would be appreciated! Thank you!

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I'd be grateful if you could look at my action/adventure piece, Future Final. It's only the first part of the first chapter, but I want to make it perfect before I write anymore.

I wouldn't mind if you give me some advice about sentence structure in it, as things have been pointed out that could be improved, but I'm finding it difficult.

Any other help is welcome.

I thought I would revive this thread, seeing as I have already started one of these. Feel free to leave a work and I will hopefully get around to a thorough critique within a few days!

Hi,

I'm looking for as aggressive a review as possible for my screenplay Freya's Replacement. I got a very informative review on it a couple of days ago, and have since updated it.

I would love it if you could read what I've posted so far (there are three parts, but they're fairly short), and then let me know how you're feeling about the direction that the plot and characters are going in. If you were watching this on TV, how would you feel about it? Please, poke lots of holes!

Thanks very much!

Review posted! Best of luck!

Hi, could you please review this: viewtopic.php?t=72168
I've already had one good review but would also like one from someone who hasn't read the original. Just to get a different perspective.
I'd just like to know if there's anything that doesn't make sense, anything you think i should leave out/change, if the characters are characterised well enough, if not why etc. and of course if there's anything you like. And anything else you can think of.
Feel free to correct grammar, punctuation too.
Thanks!

Hi leebass, my review is posted. Hope the revision process is a good one!

I'll be around the next couple of days for reviews so post something if you want a great review! I critique roughly but wisely!

Hi Trident!

Feel free to rip this apart. It's a short story.
I'm working on rewriting and I'd love your input.
Specific areas would be 'able-to-follow-ness', pace and anything you see fit.
Thanks. ^^

I'm doing a little bumping to avoid repeat threads. I often have trouble deciding on what I should critique. This thread gives solves that problem! Feel free to hit me up.