Persephonia gave me an awesome review on my NaNo prologue that I posted, like, three days ago. XD She went really in-depth and explained what she liked and also my mistakes and how to fix them. Kudos to all listed here!
"There's a big difference between shooting a target and shooting a charging Wargal. A target isn't usually trying to kill you." ~Halt, Ranger's Apprentice Book Two: The Burning Bridge
Great reviewer, Master_Yoda is. Inspirational words, he brings. Outstanding grammatical and practical knowledge of dialogue, he has. Really makes me want to correct my mistakes and learn from them, he does.
Bilbo: What have I got in my pocket? Gollum: Handsies! Bilbo: Nope, guess again. Gollum: A knife! No, no... Bilbo: Wrong again. Gollum: String! Or... Nothing!
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