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Wed Dec 03, 2008 8:13 pm
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CastlesInTheSky says...

Hi there Penguin.
I'd be delighted if you could review this: post460742.html#460742
Thankyou very much.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Mon Dec 08, 2008 5:52 pm
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Adnamarine says...

I closed my eyes and pointed, and here's what I got:


Pretty please and thank you. Sorry it took me so long.
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Wed Dec 24, 2008 12:26 am
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Twit says...


Scavenger 1.5. Please? Like, pretty please?
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Tue Mar 10, 2009 12:08 am
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Sare Agama says...

I have a couple; I won't give you my fan-fics, unless you have read Warriors or Redwall.

The Test A True story/event

Vashoa's Life My first story-ever.

Fake, or Real? For the February CIA contest

Whatever you feel like doing, or think needs doing. :)
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Fri Aug 05, 2011 5:02 am
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PenguinAttack says...

This space now open for Reviews!
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Fri Aug 05, 2011 5:32 am
Jas says...

Hi Pengu,

Could I please have a review on that?


Thanks! I'd really appreciate if you worked on the characters, plot, imagery and stuff rather than nitpicky grammar stuff. Thanks again!

I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.


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Thu Aug 25, 2011 6:17 am
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joshuapaul says...



Please read my story and tell me if you like it or not.
Thank you,

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Fri Aug 26, 2011 1:59 am
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Courtlyn says...

I don't need any comments on punctuation/grammatical inconsistencies; I really just need it based on style, content, readability, etc. Thank you! :)
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I love to research things.I do mostly nonfiction pieces such as current events, political/ethical/religious topics,and historical/scientific research.If you've a question you'd like answered or a topic about which you'd like to know more,I'll gladly write you a piece on it!

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Sat Aug 27, 2011 6:50 am
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ReisePiecey says...

If you're not too busy, I need you to read over this. topic86694.html

I've seen you give really good reviews and I'm in need of a really good review right now. Like I say, I personally don't like the beginning, the diary entry, and I'm thinking of replacing it with a short glimpse into my main character's future - as that is more exciting.

Anyway, I really want you to give this a thorough review.
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Sun Sep 11, 2011 4:32 pm
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joshuapaul says...


Another one for you. Take your time it's in ten parts and rather long :)

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Wed Jan 25, 2012 12:53 am
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thetraveler says...

Do you mind reviewing for me?
Thanks :D
I just want to know if you like it, what you like if anything, if you don't like it, what I could do better :)
"Elementary, my dear Watson"
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Spoiler! :

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Thu Jan 26, 2012 2:35 pm
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ZlyWilk says...


Anyway, here's my most recent poem. Thanks in advance!
formerly GoldenQuill

Donna: You alright?
Doctor: I'm always alright.
Donna: Is 'always alright' secret Time Lord code for really not alright at all?
Doctor: Why?
Donna: Because I'm alright too.

I review everything.