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Tue Jun 17, 2008 12:36 pm
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PenguinAttack says...



You're set, Birdie. ^^

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Tue Jun 17, 2008 2:02 pm
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scasha says...



Hey Le Penguin!

Can you crit this please? Chapters 5 and 6?

The Duty Chapters 5 and 6

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Tue Jun 17, 2008 2:57 pm
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Sapphire says...



Hiya! Could you maybe have a read of this poem:

Photos and Mementos

I guess the main point I'm wondering about is if it actually makes the reader feel anything!

Thank you very much!

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Tue Jul 08, 2008 10:12 pm
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Eimear says...



Heya, thought I'd use one of my contest prizes?

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Thanks in advance,

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Wed Jul 09, 2008 1:38 am
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Gladius says...



Ok, I don't think you mentioned this in your initial post, but...fanfictions?

Wings of Darkness

If you're interested, know that I'd much rather someone commented on my plot. I've got my grammar problems pretty much sorted out, and I know where my weakest points in this are (which I plan on editing later--as soon as I finish it!!). Other than that, rip it apart! :D

The only thing is, I wonder if you'll be somewhat unable to help because of what this fanfiction is based off... *sigh*
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BigBadBear says...



Night Terrors

I have just posted this and wondered if I could get some reviews?
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Would love help on this.
  





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Okay, so I'm a little behind kids, I've done up to Eimear's poem and will be getting to the rest as soon as possible.

Sorry about the delay.

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You're all in the clear!

Request away. ^^

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Sun Aug 03, 2008 3:50 am
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BigBadBear says...



I'm so obsessed with your critiques. They're so awesome.

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I would very much like feedback on this. Thank you!

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Sun Aug 03, 2008 4:04 am
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Lethero says...



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Bonjour PA. I hate begging, but I seriously need this reviewed: It has not been touched since I posted it (I think people didn't want to read it because of the title so I changed that). I just need grammar, but if you offer advice in any other area that would be fine too. Au revior.

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You guys are both in the clear! ^^

Aren't you luck you caught me on a lazy Sunday.

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Sun Aug 03, 2008 7:25 am
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Jamie_rocks says...



This is the recently edited first chapter to a fiction story I'm working on. It's a little long, I know, but I need reviews. The main thing I'm worried about is that my reviewers can't seem to agree on whether or not my MCs are stereotypical, so if you could touch on that I'd be really grateful.

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Tue Aug 19, 2008 1:17 am
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PenguinAttack says...



Ready for more, my cheeeeeldrens.


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Tue Aug 19, 2008 2:18 am
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Clo says...



Pwease? ^^

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