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Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:34 pm
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Sleeping Valor says...



Kidnapped Chapter One needs your love! =P There's two parts, as as you will notice I made the tremendous mistake of putting both parts in the same thread but in different posts. Never again. Feel free to comment on each part separately, or both at once (they're short. =P)

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Sat Mar 15, 2008 1:12 am
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Wolf says...



Thanks Jared, Jenna, and Keek!

I'm going to start with Harborville Prologue, and hopefully I'll get it done -- that's assuming that my mom doesn't come up and disturb my crittage. XP
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Sat Mar 15, 2008 3:49 pm
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Wolf says...



Come on people, I need more critiquing material!

I've done so far:
-- A moonlit stroll
-- Diary, EDITED
-- The Reason (part one)
-- HarborVille Prologue
-- All Eyes on Us
-- The Broken - Chapter One
-- EverWayward #13
-- Freedom Fortnight
-- I think I'm in Love #4
-- Benedict's Goodbye

Up next:
-- Kidnapped Chapter One
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Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:16 am
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BigBadBear says...



Hey, thanks for critting everything! I have one more thing for you.

Pianissimo

Thanks!

-Jared
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Would love help on this.




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Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:22 am
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Monki says...



Well, if you don't get super swamped by all the maniacs who are going to throw their writing at you like crazy, you can critique this if you wish. I need some major feedback quickly.

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Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:25 am
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chocoholic says...



I'd love another crit on my prologue.

topic27154.html

Thanks heaps.
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Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:40 pm
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Wolf says...



Sorry I'm a little behind... my mom needs to use he computer now (I think) but I'll start critiquing Kidnapped Chapter One as soon as she's done. And then I'll do all the rest. XP
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Sun Mar 16, 2008 8:53 pm
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Aedomir says...



Hi Wolf! I thought you might like to see this one, they are three wolf drawings I did. (well, one that I edited!).

Click Here! Thank you!
We are all Sociopaths: The Prologue

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Sun Mar 16, 2008 9:33 pm
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Wolf says...



Awesome, thanks Aedomir!

I just finished Kidnapped Chapter One so now I'll do Pianissimo. :)
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Sat Apr 05, 2008 12:08 am
JFW1415 says...



*Pokes* Want another? If you get the chance, I'll love you! :P

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~JFW1415




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Mon Apr 21, 2008 6:06 pm
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Wolf says...



Revamped! w00t-w00t!

I edited the original post, and I am once again open for business. :)
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Wed May 07, 2008 1:37 am
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JFW1415 says...



*Pokes*

Part One
Part Two

I'm kind of confused by your names (it's late,) so I'll describe what I need.

No grammar/spelling - I can catch that myself. (I just have to stop looking at it for a few days, then come back.) An overall will be greatly appreciated, as well as lines that could be stronger/don't make any sense.

If you don't like the first part, try to stick it out. The second part is a little shorter, and everyone seems to like it more. (Which is strange - I had to force out the second part, while the first slid onto the page. And they've both recieved the same amount of editing. *Shrug*)

Thanks, and take your time! I don't want to rush you. :wink:

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