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Alfred Symon's Critic Clinic: Bringing Smiles since the 60's

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Mon Feb 13, 2012 9:46 pm
AlfredSymon says...



Wario! Your Quick Critique is done! Sorry for the delay, but I'm sure it's the best I can give!

Next up, DG and BC!
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Wed Feb 15, 2012 11:50 am
AlfredSymon says...



Black Chaos!!!!

The patient survived the operation! Congrats! I hope I helped!

Next up, DG!
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Sun Feb 19, 2012 8:12 pm
MoonlightMayhem says...



Hello! I was wondering if you could critique my NEWWW and improved Prologue for Keychain Magic which I have worked very hard on in updating. Thank you!

Here's the link:
work.php?id=93536
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Thu Feb 23, 2012 10:55 am
AlfredSymon says...



Sorry, my Dear MM, but we have a short delay. Elections are coming, see. Just you wait and this patient is good to go!
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Tue Feb 28, 2012 8:37 pm
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MM! More delay coming! Please be patient! I'm sorry for all the trouble, but it's not gonna be this week. Maybe the next!
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Fri Mar 16, 2012 12:25 pm
AlfredSymon says...



The Clinic is now back! MM, your patient have survived! New patients welcome!
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Sat Mar 17, 2012 12:38 am
zohali93 says...



hi! um could you review my story please. i shortened my first chapter into half.
i don't think its a good start so i would like others review(tired of beging my younger siblings to read it.younger! they never read it)
i suck at the begining please help point out what mmy problems are.thanks
work.php?id=93995

if you review poetry(i forgot what you wrote on the first page) please review the one whose link is shown below.

thanks a bunch!
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Sat Mar 17, 2012 9:40 pm
AlfredSymon says...



Of course! I'll have two patients in one! Oh, and I'll also give them a simple Point Out, by the way, since you've mentioned the word in your request :D
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Sun Mar 18, 2012 8:05 am
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Zohali! Your story patient is finished! Only left out is the poem! :)
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Wed Mar 21, 2012 9:49 pm
DevanEWilliams says...



Hey, this looks like a cool place. :D
Do you mind reviewing a (somewhat long) short story of mine? It's been up a super long time, but people appear to be afraid of it due to the length. Also, feel free to be as harsh as you like!

work.php?id=91104

THANK YOU! :D
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Thu Mar 22, 2012 3:54 am
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But of course, Devan! No length is long or short in the world of literature! Sure!
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Thu Mar 22, 2012 9:43 pm
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Devan!!!! The patient has survived! Great piece, by the way!
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Fri Mar 23, 2012 3:59 am
SidereaAquila says...



Hello! I just posted my first piece recently, and I was wondering if you'd have time to do a Quick Critique. It's just a novel I'm writing for fun, but feedback is always nice. Here it is: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=94160

I will pay with a review of my own, if you'd like. Thanks in advance!
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Fri Mar 23, 2012 9:54 am
AlfredSymon says...



Of course, Siderea! Your doctor is IN! :) About the review deal, well lemme think about it... I always want to get a hands on my patient first :D
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Sat Mar 24, 2012 1:30 am
SidereaAquila says...



OK, thanks!
Skittles: Taste the Spectrum

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