Very cute! I think it would look nicer if there were some capitalization, though. And I don't like that it dies, I would prefer it if it perhaps, rested on the ground, had a lie down, a bit of a relax perhaps? The ending is lovely, and the whole poem makes the raindrop sound so alone, even though it would be falling with lots of other raindrops. Perhaps you could elaborate on that effect. But whatever you do, keep that last line exactly as it is, it's perfect.
Overeasy, many things have been said about this and I agree with most of them. I like the way that you described the rain drop falling onto the Earth, but what purpose are you fulfilling?
It looks like metaphors are what is missing in this poem.
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