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When I read this, it was as if I could feel the breeze. You didn't over or under-describe it - you did it perfectly. It may seem like a random example but I found it was like this throughout much of the story. I also quoted the line above because I found it to be a really satisfying end.“Very true,” said Hroda, closed his eyes, and turned his face to catch the soft breeze while it lasted.
An occasional low hanging branch got into the rider’s faces or hair.
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