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Mage Chronicles: Draft Two



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Wed Nov 08, 2017 12:25 pm
ShadowPrincess16 says...



Hey all! So, I first posted Mage Chronicles here about a year (maybe less?) ago. I've since completely revamped it and finished it for the second time. I'm looking for someone to read through it and pretty much point out anything that needs fixing. Grammar, plot issues, romance issues, worldbuilding. Whatever needs to be fixed, go ahead and point it out.

Mage Chronicles is a fantasy/romance that deals with LGBT relationships and family dynamics.
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“wanting what you could not have led to misery and madness”
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I was flummoxed by fractious Franny's decision to abrogate analgesics for the moribund victims of the recent conflagration. Of course, to display histrionics was discretionary, but I did so anyways, implicating a friend in my drama to make the effect cumulative. I think a misanthrope would have a prosaic appellation, perhaps one related to autonomy and the rejection of anthropocentrism. I think they wouldn't think much of the prominence of watching the coagulation of tea to prognosticate future malevolent events, not even if those events were related to jurisprudence.
— Spearmint