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Children of Dread - Blood Oath



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Tue Jan 26, 2016 3:11 am
EmmVeePi says...



Book one of my fantasy/mythological epic. I am still open to possibly making it part one of a single book but for the time being it is a stand alone book. It stands at 40,500 words right now. I will go ahead and rate this 16+ for some violence and suggestion of sexuality(nothing explicit).

The story starts out following two princes who get swept out to sea during a storm and meet two strangers on an island. Later they return to their kingdom and one is made king. After that a mysterious wander arrives and things will never be the same in the kingdom.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1e-fYfBSHP_YbgAoUvjcdEQ7XThLIAfVXDEb9Ll4wM9E/edit?usp=sharing

Looking for "big picture" editing. I am not that concerned with specific grammar and punctuation right now(however if there is a rule I am repeatedly breaking or a major weakness on the technical side feel free to inform me). Story arc, character development, pacing, concept, these are the things I am interested in getting feedback on.
  








"For a short space of time I remained at the window watching the pallid lightnings that played above Mont Blanc and listening to the rushing of the Arve, which pursued its noise way beneath. The same lulling sounds acted as a lullaby to my too keen sensations; when I placed my head upon my pillow, sleep crept over me; I felt it as it came and blessed the giver of oblivion."
— Mary Shelley, Frankenstein