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There are two ways to approach books. Either you fit big plots and concepts into a confined space or you try to lengthen stories that could be better told on a smaller scale.
Little errors like that are dotted throughout this piece and you just need to go back and make a quick fix.She said sarcastically, flipping her hair in his face.
"the story/literary aspects such as characters/plot/pacing/style" sounds about right. "more advice on dialogue" Also sounds good. Do whatever you feel like doingAudy wrote:My question for you is: is there anything in particular you wish for me to focus on...
The problem though is that you keep switching point of views. One moment it's first person and the next, it's third person. I think it starts:Little errors like that are dotted throughout this piece and you just need to go back and make a quick fix.She said sarcastically, flipping her hair in his face.
It's clearly explained. But that's the problem, you see? It's explained. It's not shown.
That little bit right there completely jerked me out of the story xD I was wondering who's monologue you were trying to type out -- Alex's or the writer's?
Because Alex LIVES in this world so he wouldn't be stating all the rules and explanations to himself because he already knows them. That'll be like me thinking aloud: "YWS stands for Young Writer's Society. The website is a community for young writers run by Nate. Tons of writers go on it everyday and I could critique other's works and have my own works critiqued."
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