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Sun Jan 18, 2009 7:38 pm
Night Mistress says...



Warning: This plot has incest, so if you don't like. don't read

I just want to know if this sounds any good.

After a couple of years, a brother starts feeling more than brotherly feeling towards his sister and decide to pays her a visit.
"I love you," she whispered in his ear, before taking his mouth with her own.

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Sun Jan 18, 2009 7:56 pm
Angel of Death says...



Hmm? Incest stories are really common but if you tweak it and make it your own, I don't see why it wouldn't be readable. Sure, the subject is a little ick but if it's good and original, I'll read it.

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Sun Jan 18, 2009 8:29 pm
Night Mistress says...



I plan to tweak it a bit Like making them....different.
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Mon Jan 19, 2009 10:39 pm
Squishy says...



i would read it and probably love it so write it
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Mon Jan 19, 2009 10:42 pm
Antigone Cadmus says...



Is that the romance story you posted with the twins? Because I found myself thinking that they seemed a bit too close. If so, you've done a good job portraying it.
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Tue Jan 20, 2009 1:59 pm
Night Mistress says...



Haruno Sakura wrote:Is that the romance story you posted with the twins? Because I found myself thinking that they seemed a bit too close. If so, you've done a good job portraying it.


yeah.
"I love you," she whispered in his ear, before taking his mouth with her own.

~Elizzabeth Grey of Addicting Posion
  





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Tue Jan 20, 2009 2:00 pm
Night Mistress says...



Squishy wrote:i would read it and probably love it so write it


it's ready posted. It's called Forbidden Love and it's in the romantic fiction.
"I love you," she whispered in his ear, before taking his mouth with her own.

~Elizzabeth Grey of Addicting Posion
  








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