I have a manuscript completed that I have decided isn't good enough and am editing for the sixth time since I wrote it two years ago. But, no matter how hard I work on it, I can't seem to find enough courage to submit it to an agent.
That brings me to the reason why I joined this site: critism. I desperatly need feedback. My only critics are currently friends and family members, and I can't trust them to be as hard on my work as I am.
My plot summary is this (it's not very good and kind of pretentious...):
Belinda is a sixteen year old girl with an overdose of angst and serious anger managment problems. She is stuck out in the middle of Washington state after being dragged away from her family and friends in upstate New York by her estranged sister, Mary. And into this mess enters the bizarre and freakish Ashes: Mar, Rina, Miriam, Kalyi and Markus. They are isolated by the school. The standard rumor is that they are troubled rich kids, but they don't draw attention to themselves and are well behaved. Except for Markus, whose personality is nearly a perfect copy of Belinda's own.
Snarky boy meets snarky girl and the fireworks start. Belinda swiftly discovers the truth behind the Ashes' mysterious auras and strange appearances: they are vampires. Her discovery brings her into the world of the night of which she has only dreamed of. However, her sister has a strange aversion to Belinda's new friends, and as time goes by, the secrets pile up and Belinda discovers things about both her sister, and herself.
I'll try to get up the first chapter once I figure out how to work this site...
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