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Sat Jul 26, 2008 4:07 pm
andimlovegalore says...



Aura - this isn't even up here, but it's on my fictionpress http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2523529/1/Aura (or some of it). This is so hard to explain, but I like the idea of just rambling about it here.

I'm still trying to get my head around totally. So far, this story is centred on Lan, a man deep in debt and confusion, he has lost his wife and is living in a kind of dream world, hardly remembering who he is any more. He lives in the city, after a war that has affected him in a way he isn't sure about, trapped inside by a high wall. Then an old friend returns to him, the rebellious, mysterious and self-destructive Dreyan, who turns him upside down, forces him to remember who he is and join in a fight against what seems to him to be the rest of the sane world. Together, they try to discover the connection between two missing kids, a murder and a strangely closed off laboratory outside of the city.

I'll just use here to talk about it =] when I'm writing other things I get lost in them. I'll keep word count and stuff ^_^
  





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Tue Jul 29, 2008 4:48 am
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It sounds like a good idea, even a little funny. How did Lan's wife die? Is the "high wall" literally a wall trapping him in the city?
  





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Tue Jul 29, 2008 1:00 pm
andimlovegalore says...



Jay wrote:It sounds like a good idea, even a little funny. How did Lan's wife die? Is the "high wall" literally a wall trapping him in the city?


In the story I'm gonna do a thing with his wife - her name was Grace and she's gonna have bene murdered, only he doesn't know that.

I want the wal to literally be a wall, a kind of defence against intruders, but works to keep the city people in too.

Thanks for replying =D helpful.
  





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