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A New Light on a Distant Shot



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Mon Jul 21, 2008 1:52 pm
myfreindsavamp says...



Disapearing for the time being.
Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:44 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  





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Thu Jul 24, 2008 2:56 pm
myfreindsavamp says...



Disapearing for the time being.
Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:45 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  





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Sat Jul 26, 2008 1:34 am
Stori says...



It's real good. No mistakes that I can see, and you conveyed the characters' feelings well.
"The one thing you can't trade for your heart's desire is your heart."
Miles Vorkosigan

"You can be an author if you learn to paint pictures with words."
Brian Jacques
  





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Sat Aug 16, 2008 2:18 pm
myfreindsavamp says...



Disapearing for the time being.
Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:46 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  





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Tue Sep 09, 2008 11:38 am
myfreindsavamp says...



disapearing for the time being.
Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:46 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  





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Mon Sep 29, 2008 11:47 am
myfreindsavamp says...



Disapearing for the time being.
Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:47 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  





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Sat Oct 25, 2008 7:36 pm
myfreindsavamp says...



Disapearing for the time being.
Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:47 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  





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Mon Oct 27, 2008 12:36 pm
sibyis says...



From what I can read here, your story seems to have a great idea. It's unique, and the characters seem dynamic and able to convey feelings well in a refreshing manner. Your characters are not at all lifeless dolls. It's nice.
  





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Wed Oct 29, 2008 12:03 am
righting says...



It was a good read... cool.
Always looking for a good book to read.
  





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Wed Oct 29, 2008 10:56 am
myfreindsavamp says...



Disapearing for the time being.
Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:48 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  








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