Yeah, this is very cliche. I wouldn't really as such call this a prologue, I would maybe say more of a blurb definitely. To make a prologue, it needs to be almost like an introduction to a story, or something that happened a day or a week, month, year, two years etc. before the actual story, or just earlier on in that day. It needs a bit more detail, and possibly if you don't want the story to be cliche, a change of plot.
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