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Alright. I've been writing this for about four months altogether. What I want to know is a) does my plot make sense, and b) does it seem convincing that my characters do what they do?

Here we go:
Story opens with sixteen year old Aurora Nightwaters, heir to the faerie throne. She is mixed breed, which means she's a nymph (water), dryad (earth), and fairy (air). There used to be a fourth type of fae, dragons. They were hunted to extinction because fire magic, the magic they used, feeds on the soul. Which gives them a mad desire to kill people to that they can replenish their own soul. For the good of the realms, they were killed.
More backstory: speaking of realms, the world is made up of 2001 dimensions. The faerie dimension, Kerea, was the very last one to be created. Who created them? The deities. They are the gods and goddesses. Most are minor ones like Chance and Betrayal. The two most major ones are the sisters of Good and Evil, Mehnkal and Naith. After the worlds were created, Naith began to feel very evil. Okay, I couldn't think of a good way to phrase that. Before, everything was intangible. The realm of the deities existed, but in such a way that feelings... Didn't really exist. Now, once the worlds are created, the five magical elements exist. Yes, five. I'll explain that, hold on. But back to Naith. She's the Goddess of Evil, right? So she needs to have power over the fifth element, Darkness. You might know it as Spirit. But there is nothing good about it. It's like... Satan's blood. Manifests pain or evil desires in you, depending on who's controlling it. Anyway, the only way to have Darkness is to learn the other four elements. So Naith learned. And then realized that Fire ate away at her and she couldn't control the evil inside of her. So she and Mehnkal thought up of a plan. Naith could transfer her powers to a worthy candidate. And the candidate could transfer their powers... And so on. But their magic has limits. They need to limit the number of times this occurs. So they chose seven times.

Flash forward to Aurora. So she's sixteen. She lives in Kerea dimension. Kerea is made up of four kingdoms. Elysian, the vampires. Riia, the humans. Erisek, the dark elves and gorgons. And Archaea, home to fae. Archaea is spilt into Seelie and Unseelie. Unseelie is wild. Parties, drinking, sex.... They are all about fun. But they can defend themselves, if need be. They protect their land and keep it because no Seelie fae can step foot in the land without dying. It's not vice versa. Unseelie fae can come out. Neither holds a grudge against the other.

Now, the royal line for Seelie Court was mixed with Unseelie a long time ago, and Aurora takes after Unseelie. She was fostered there in her thirteenth year.

Her mother is greedy and wants quick money, so plans to marry Aurora off to a rich prince. Aurora doesn't mind marrying for the good of her kingdom, but all the suitors her mother is showing her would mooch off of her and ruin Archaea. Auorora runs off the night of her engagement party because she hears that Blathen, the elvish prince her mother decides Aurora will marry, is going to kidnap Aurora. Finds a secret tunnel, her sort-of friends, Ceressa and Nathan, happen to fall through with her. She gets a visit from the very first goddess of evil- Naith- telling Aurora that she is going to be the goddess of evil. Forever. Naith makes it impossible for Aurora to turn bakc, and also gifts her the memories of the past 5 deities of evil. Naith also says that until Aurora kills the 6th and current goddess of evil, she won't be able to turn around and go back home. Anyway...They finally find their way out, but into an assassin's rendez vous camp type thing, blah, blah blah, Nathan gets killed defending his sister, Ceressa, by Daniel, a vampire prince who has been forced to become an assassin. Daniel decides to guard Aurora, except they've met before at Aurora's engagement party. Daniel confides in his friend, Arianna, former-lady-turned-pirate-now-ex-queen. Arianna confides in her brother, Nikolas. Let's call him Nick. Daniel has to leave because one of his employers needs him. Aurora escapes with her friends just as Daniel's assistant, Celia, is about to torture her. Daniel is coming back to camp at that point, and he stumbles onto Nathan, who attacks him. So Daniel kills Nathan in self-defense, Ceressa starts hating Daniel. Aurora kills Celia in this attack, but that doesn't matter. Arianna and Nick stumble upon them and the three continue upon their not-so-merry way. (Aurora goes because this is her quest, Ceressa goes because she's Aurora's friend, Daniel goes because he's in love with Aurora, Arianna goes because she's Daniel's friend, and Nick goes to protect his sister, Arianna,) After encountering a series of obstacles, they finally make it to a castle, D'Onnlrothe. Aurora has been falling in love with Daniel, (who is her soul mate, by the way). Ceressa hates Aurora now for falling in love with her brother's killer. Turns out the last Goddess of Evil lives here, Morgan le Faye. Aurora defeats her by taking the fourth and fifth elements, Fire and Death. The 5th god of evil, Zephir, gives Aurora a crash course on her job description.

So of course, the amazing catch to immortality and becoming a goddess is.....
Aurora has to succumb to the part of her spirit that is evil... meaning that she'll probably end up killing a couple billion people. Only then will she be able to journey to the realm of Evil, where her soul will become complete and she will have the full powers of the Goddess of Evil. And if Aurora doesn't feel like killing a bunch of people? Oh, yeah. You'll have to use your willpower to keep your evil side in check, which means you'll either go crazy and kill yourself or lose control and kill everyone anyway.

Aurora and her friends journey back, each going back to their rightful homes. Book 1 leaves off with Aurora staring at the castle, wishing for Daniel to be with her.


SO sorry this is so long. But does this make sense? Do the choices the character's make reflect their situation well enough?

I'll post the plot of book 2 soon enough... but what do you think of book 1?

That sounds really interesting however it is often the writing not the idea that makes a book great. If you are able to write high-fantasy well I imagine it will be an amazing epic adventure if you are unable to write high-fanasy well it could turn out disastorous. It looks very good and in reply to one of your questions to make a characters actions believable you need to put yourself in the characters postion and then make people believe it. There is not much that a good writer is unable to make a believable action.