Okay, so i started writing a novel, and the main character's name is something which, in another language, means Shadow. I need a small prologue poem, but I can't for the life of me figure out how to make it sound... I don't know. The setting is somewhat medieval, but the way I write it.... ugh. I either seem to make it sound wayyyy too grandiose, pretentious and melodramatic, or just plain cliche, like i'm emulating someone who emulated someone who plagiarized someone who got inspired by someone who copied Tolkein. Here it is so far. (Don't laugh.)
Shadows in the night,
Moving, drifting, changing.
Fluid like water, like fire, hiding great secrets within.
One man lurking.
One man to live in them, One bright man,
Destined for something else
The power within him concealed,
But yet
And as light chases away all others,
He the only Shadow remains.
I am just godawful at writing poetry. Does anyone have any writing tips?
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