so judging by the poll, it seems somewhere around 75 percent of people here on YWS write fantasy...
I was wondering, since there are so many of you, if one of you could give me some tips. I, like other fantasy writers, have created a world with different rules than our's has. I'm struggling to get those rules across to the reader in a way that is a little more subtle than "this is how the world you're reading about is different: ..."
the specific rules I need to get across are that everyone has a twin, whom no one else can see. this twin is called their Chi, and can give them help by strengthening them physically, or making them faster, have better reflexes etc. this is how I've delivered it so far.
""Thrust your full body into it," Robert had said, "don't rely entirely on your Chi, he can only do so much."
"Yeah Duncan," teased twelve year old Dean, "you act like I'm a Spirit of the Beyond or something. I can't do everything for you."
"I'm doing my best. Hey would you mind a little more in my legs and not my arms?" I asked Dean telepathically. Dean shifted the boost of strength he had been sending to my arms to my legs, and my sword thrusts became dramatically faster. I had never needed this much physical energy for anything other than chores like chopping wood, but now that I had started the training to become a warrior, Dean and I were just getting the hang of the assistance he could give me.
If not for Robert's Chi, he would have no idea how much effort Dean was putting into our lessons, but unfortunately for me (and Dean), if either of us began to slack off, he was swiftly informed."
please post a way I can do this subtlely below.
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