I am using an editor called 'slick write' to edit my new short story The Recovery (need help sharpening it up, please review if you get a chance) and it is picking up a lot of sentences that are in the passive voice. I have looked up ways to eliminate them but the tips I have found have not been helpful. The sentances I am really struggling on are:
'Her eyes are red from crying earlier.'
'He is supposed to be our father'
'What if she gets the wrong impression and we get sent to a mental asylum with war veterans?'
'“OK,” says the doctor at the end of what seems like hours of questioning for Jo and Alice but could only be the 10 minutes they were allocated.'
'Her eyes are dark with exhaustion'.
'Jo agonizes constantly about her little sister, worries that she is more hurt than she lets on.'
Does anyone have any tips? Or ways to fix the sentences above? Thanks xx
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