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Esmé
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kaolin, get a life...
As to the script, I really enjoyed it... I have an irresistable urge to go wash my hair*
LOL
It was funny and had humor - way better than most advertisements, hehe. |
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| Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 8:13 pm Post subject: |
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| Wow... hilarious. And the YouTube video with it, amazing. Homophones are tricky ("buy" for "by" in "by some now"), but it was well written, and I laughed. |
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| Posted: Wed Feb 14, 2007 2:57 pm Post subject: |
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haha this is really great.  I wish I could use it for my school's dinner theater.
randomness is good. keep it up =] |
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| Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 7:57 pm Post subject: |
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One thing.. In media and English, they akways say to use 3 things in every list, especialy if you're trying to persuade someone to do/buy somthing. So maybe with the introduction, you should have 3 statements, and not 4? Give a better effect.. Just my oppinion. Other than that. Loved it 
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| Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 7:25 pm Post subject: |
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Very funny. I didn't see any grammatical errors, and even if I did, I forgot them.
And I liked your commercial on youtube. The voices were funny. |
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| Wow, don't you love how old posts get brought back up? This script was great but what is with you people and killing cats? |
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| Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 1:46 pm Post subject: |
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Me and a few friends were thinking of doing this in live action... instead of just the crappy cartoon I made without any help whatsoever... because I WAS ALL THE VOICES... but yeah...
I'll like... get onto that.
God damn, I love this script of mine. |
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| Posted: Thu Aug 23, 2007 11:35 pm Post subject: |
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| rotfl!! XD I heart funny scripts. This sounds like something me and my friend would write together... we're award winning authors ya know... anyways, great hilarious commercial script thingy. |
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| Posted: Thu Oct 04, 2007 10:49 pm Post subject: |
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This is hilarious!! You should right comercials for a living!!
By the way I used that stuff and now i can see the future  |
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