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Solvalery wrote:You can't say I'm just a "wannabe" -- that is unless you lie too.

Solvalery wrote:Do you ever feel people is areignoring you?

Solvalery wrote: Like for example, that one day my boyfriend was ignoring me. Explain why. Is it a relationship threating argument or is your MC just blowing it out of proportion? I told him the mall's security guard was following me all around the mall after saying he had a crush on me. Man, it worked! He was walking next to me in less than half an hour. We are still together. Now tell me, is lying bad? I saved a relationship, I found a great solution to my problem.

Solvalery wrote:Perhaps now you are struggling whether if the first sentence is true or not. Do you believe me when I say I'm a compulsive liar? haha I love this conundrum!!

Because... maybe I'm lying, you neverknow.

Truth is comma, I'm always me; a pathological liar.

They say we never know what we have until it's gone, right?

Solvalery wrote:

~Thoughts of a Compulsive Liar~

I'm a compulsive liar.
-You use a LOT of contractions in this piece for the remainder of your story. It just doesn't make sense to say "I am".. so I would change it to increase flow and keep consistency. It sounds a whole lot better, also.

In fact, that's the only truth I've said in a long time. Lying is something that comes naturally *to me, ever since I was little. It's something I need to do. I'm lying before I even notice it. Maybe it sounds ironic, but it's fun.It's ironic, but fun.-( no questioning needed)- People around me never get bored.
* "In" me sound funky. Funky isn't cool bro.
I have a different personality wherever I go. Some ( people) think that's bad. But look at it this way; I'm telling people what they want to hear, therefore everyone's happy. With my grandma I'm an angel and in school I'm a riot!
GAAHHH! That just sounds cheesy for some reason... try this-
One minute, I'm an angel with my grandmother- and the next, I'm a riot at school.
You can't say I'm just a "wannabe" -- that is unless you lie.

Truth is, I'm always me; a pathological liar. (I bet you're dying to ask me what would happen if my worlds collide!) And I'll gladly answer; I'll make up some stories to cover up old ones.

Easy, simple, fun! Accept it -- you're never bored around me.

Actually, lying can be good. Maybe if you'd walk in my shoes for a little once while you'd understand me better actually understand me.

-THIS is where the change in tone should occur. No more "happy idleness"- get serious. The "happy act" could get a little annoying after a while, if you know what I mean. So thanks for moving it on!
They say we never know what we have until it's gone, right? Do you ever feel people are ignoring you? They are obviously forgetting what they have, you gotta remind them. And one of the best ways is making them feel like they are losing you, make them feel jealousy.

Like for example, that one day my boyfriend was ignoring me.-
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I told him (that) the mall's security guard was following me all around the mall after saying he had a crush on me. Man, it worked! He was walking next to me in less than half an hour. We are still together. Now tell me, was lying bad? It saved my relationship,I found a great solution to my problem.

Now, don't label me as a Liar. Seriously, it sounds wrong that's wrong.Sounds like I am a bad person while I really am notYou are making look like a bad person, when in reality, I'm not. I would call it being highly creative -- most of my lies did happenwere truths to begin with, but I exaggerate everything a bit just exaggerated them a little. I make life a little more interesting. You know it's true! You know, just to make life a little more interesting.

Perhaps now you are struggling whether if the first sentence is true or not.Do you think a was lying about my first line? Do you believe me when I say I'm a compulsive liar?

Because... maybe I'm lying, I could be lying, you know.

Like for example, that one day my boyfriend was ignoring me.

I told him that the mall's security guard was following me around after saying he had a crush on me. Man, it worked! He was walking next to me in less than half an hour. We are still together. Now tell me, was lying bad? It saved my relationship.