Samuel Garrison
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 Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2006 11:03 pm Post subject: |
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Wow, I'm grateful for all the help everyone. *jaw drops* LOL! 
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| Firstly dont use words like linen or breeched,cs not many know what they mean, this is way too complicated , this would throw me strait of a story, Sorry to be harsh but its true, go for somthing simple , or maybe its just my lack of logic speeking again, any way i liked the wolf pellets. |
While, I enjoy the insight, I do have a decent vocabulary and I have no intention of dulling it. I'm a writer that continuously strives to learn sentence structures and yes, new words. In other words, I'm a geek that researches a Thesaurus. I recommend for one for you too,  You'll be amazed on the vast improvement of your vocabulary. Glad you liked the wolf pelts.
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| Plus, of course, linen and breeches are both quite common words. |
Agreed. Thanks, Smaur. This story is straight from the eighteenth century, so clothing attire is very different from what we wear in our century.
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| Rats! I was hoping you'd understand because I barely understood what I was trying to say! Well ... it was just a general feel that you weren't describing what a character was wearing, but rather an object. There are phrases and things that are practically always used for clothing descriptions and you're not really using them at all. \There's nothing really wrong with it, it's just that it doesn't really feel right to me ... welcome to my confusing mind. Basically, I wasn't really sure what I mean when I wrote it, only that I had a general feel of something "wrong". |
*smiles* Well, I'll definitely plug away at it some more and see if I can achieve a desirable effect.
Thank you Smaur, blog, and Éloeré. *runs off editing.* Yay! |
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