her body was a piece of art:
bones carved sculptures in her skin
and her ribs jutted with claws like angels’ wings.
She felt so light that she sometimes thought
Perhaps I’ll fly today,
when she looked in the mirror and admired
the triumph etched in each
spare line in her severe physique
with a smile drawn across her tight face,
more a wince than anything else.
during her more inspired times,
she would really consider it,
would become determined to become a bird
and spread her arms with their knobby elbows
which were too big for the tiny girl she was,
and suspend them in the heavy air, until the effort
of flying became too much-
and her eyes were like a bird’s.
they were bright and moved almost constantly,
so much that they grew tired of the mirror’s glare
and grew gaunt, where the tired skin
under her judging, hating eyes
pulled and fell and darkened
in unspoken and overwhelming sadness
that was yet unknown and unacknowledged
by the heart that held them.
but her body truly was a piece of art-
it was a tribute to pain and perfection
and a hardwon trophy,
a reminder of hungry nights
when her barely-there stomach roared
in dissatisfaction and neglect,
a reminder
of the sour taste of bile
and teeth that had started to go black-
it was a tribute to
the pursuit of happiness
and a body slowly giving way
to hollow, knobby
bird bones.
I know this needs work, but I kind of like it, and am definitely willing to do a whole lot on it. Any thoughts?
Thanks!
-Coral-
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