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Sun Sep 12, 2010 11:44 am
seeminglymeaningless says...



Leave it to the DYNAMIC DUO

The Dynamic Duo: Light_Devil (the Dragon Lady) and me (the Necromancer) would love to review your work :)

Basically, if you ask for a review here, you will receive two separate reviews, one from me and one from Azrael (Light_Devil).


What we will review:

We will review ANYTHING and EVERYTHING... but poetry (we just don't understand it as a medium and you're better off asking someone else who will know what they are doing :P).

We will review anything you link us to, regardless of length, content rating or quality - we are here solely to help.


What we ask:

+ you provide a title to your work
+ a working link
+ it is pointless asking the four of us to review a novel/work that hasn't been edited from previous reviews, you're going to get the same comments about the same things. We kindly ask that you make sure you have edited your work from previous suggestions from reviews before asking a review from us
+ and most importantly, reply to our review if possible in your thread (not only does this show that you will communicate with your reviewers, but it bumps your story back up to the top of the forum)


Who are we?

The Necromancer: Me = Honest, Very Much So
18 year old university student, studying my first year of a Bachelor of Secondary Education (Majors in Physics and English). I love writing fantasy and science fiction.
Rate of Review
YWS-aholic. Will review within the day of the request generally, unless you've asked to review a novel, or there are assignments to complete.

The Dragon Lady: Light_Devil = Cruel to be Kind
16 year old, A grade student. She writes about anything and everything. Her current aspiration is to become a movie director/producer.
Rate of Review
Will review things after school hours/after exams.

So what are you waiting for?

Eagerly awaiting your requests,

All for One, and One for All! One Man's Trash, is Another Man's Treasure!

The Dynamic Duo!
Jai and Azrael



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Completed/Status

Coat of Many Colors by Calligraphy
COMPLETE!

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The Postman by HomelessPorcupine
COMPLETE!

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Playthings by iceprincess
COMPLETE!

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A Shot of Arrogance by Skins
COMPLETE!
Chapter One
Chapter Two
Chapter Three
Chapter Four
Chapter Five
Chapter Six
Chapter Seven
Chapter Eight
Chapter Nine - Part One
Chapter Nine - Part Two

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It's What I Do by ultraviolet
COMPLETE!

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Beauty's Beast by GirlInTheMirror
COMPLETE!

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Attack of the Time Flies by Nephthys
COMPLETE!

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Blue Jay by Apple
Item has been deleted

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The Devil's Pocket Watch by PinkShearwater
COMPLETE!
Prologue
Chapter One

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How difficult life could be by chetanbhasin
AWAITING THE AUTHOR TO TAKE THE SUGGESTIONS OF PREVIOUS REVIEWS
It is pointless asking the four of us to review a novel that hasn't been edited from previous replies, so when Chetan has implemented the suggestions made from his previous reviewers, he will resubmit his request, and we'll get right on it.
Pending Changes/Under review.
1/2 Musketeers have reviewed so far. (Jai has)

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I've Already Tried by ultraviolet
COMPLETE!

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The Pain of Glass by Kitty15
COMPLETE!

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A shot of Arrogance by Skins
Under review.
Chapter Nine
1/2 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Ten
1/2 Musketeers have reviewed so far.

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Flyer's Flight: The Story Of The Opal by Maddy
Under review
Prologue
1/2 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter One
1/2 Musketeers have reviewed so far.

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More Snippets by idraax
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragons have reviewed so far.

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PS I Hate You (Contest Entry) by Shubhi
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragons have reviewed so far.

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Chapter Two: Salem by Apple
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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The Last Day by TIGERSPRITE
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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Can You See Me? (Chapter One) by Skins
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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Freya's Replacement by Nephthys
Under review.
Part One
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Two
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Three
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Four
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Five
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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Kiss of Death: Chapter Two by Tigersprite
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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Can You See Me?: Chapter Two by Skins
Under review.
0/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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The Masquerader Chap. 5 by megsug
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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Paper Hearts and Bagels by Esther Sylvester
Section One
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Section Two
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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We are all Birds by onceuponatim3xo
Under review.
0/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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Stop and Stare by Skins
Part One
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Two
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Three
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Four
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Five
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Six
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Seven
Under review.
1/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Part Eight
Under review.
0/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

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The Masquerader by megsug
Prologue
Under review.
0/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Chapter One - Part One
Under review.
0/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Chapter One - Part Two
Under review.
0/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Chapter Two
Under review.
0/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Chapter Three
Under review.
0/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.
Chapter Four
Under review.
0/1 Necromancers + 0/1 Dragon Ladies have reviewed so far.

.................................... <--- This could be you!
Last edited by seeminglymeaningless on Sun Mar 06, 2011 12:03 pm, edited 48 times in total.
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Mon Sep 13, 2010 3:50 am
Calligraphy says...



oooooh YAY I get to be first! Will you please (please, please, pleeeeease) review my short story Coat Of Many Colors. (Possibly by the 14?)
Thanks,
A. S.
  





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Mon Sep 13, 2010 5:03 am
HomelessPorcupine says...



Oooh, 4 for the price of 1! As up front payment for the services of you 4 musketeers, here is a musketeers bar. 8)

Spoiler! :
Image


Okay, so here's the link! It's for the week long contest.

post762582.html#p762582

Please and thank you!
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Mon Sep 13, 2010 7:06 am
seeminglymeaningless says...



Spoiler! :
Hey guys :D

Completed/Status

Coat of Many Colors by Calligraphy
COMPLETE!
4/4 Musketeers have reviewed.

Hope you enjoyed our reviews :)

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The Postman by HomelessPorcupine
COMPLETE!
4/4 Musketeers have reviewed.

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Anyone else up for 4 reviews? :3
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Mon Sep 13, 2010 12:50 pm
iceprincess says...



Heyyyyy Jai! :D Help me review this? It's actually an edited (and a little bit expanded) version of Playthings, so you don't really have to go through it again. :wink:
you'll never find another sweet little girl with sequined sea foam eyes
ocean lapping voice, smile coy as the brightest quiet span of sky
and you're all alone again tonight; not again, not again, not again.
and don't it feel alright, and don't it feel so nice? lovely.


  





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Mon Sep 13, 2010 9:02 pm
Sins says...



Before I post anything... do you review novels? Not whole ones, obviously, but kind of long ones... :lol:

Basically, I was wondering if you'd review a novel for me. The reason I'm hesitant is simply because it actually has nine chapters... I wouldn't expect you to review the entire novel, chapter by chapter or anything, unless you wanted to, that is. So yeah... What do you think?

novel.php?id=510 - Here's the link if you want it.

Don't worry, I won't start mentally punching you and calling you a ginger dog if you say no or think it's too much. :smt003 I'll just cry.

Not really, that would be worrying.
I didn't know what to put here so I put this.
  





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Tue Sep 14, 2010 12:04 am
seeminglymeaningless says...



Spoiler! :
We'll hop to it :D

Playthings by iceprincess
COMPLETE!
4/4 Musketeers have reviewed.

A shot of Arrogance by Skins
Under review.
Chapter One
2/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Two
2/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Three
2/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Four
2/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Five
2/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Six
2/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Seven
2/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Eight
1/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Nine - Part One
1/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Chapter Nine - Part Two
1/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Last edited by seeminglymeaningless on Fri Sep 24, 2010 2:23 pm, edited 6 times in total.
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Tue Sep 14, 2010 3:20 pm
ultraviolet says...



Hey, can you review my short story [September Contest] It's What I Do? Please and thank you!
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Wed Sep 15, 2010 1:16 am
GirlInTheMirror says...



Could you pretty pretty please review the beginning of my story "Beauty's Beast"? It would mean so much to me!!!
  





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Wed Sep 15, 2010 1:29 am
seeminglymeaningless says...



Spoiler! :
Heya guys. We're a bit backlogged, here in Frace, but we'll try our best to keep up with the requests.

Currently I have two assignments due, one on physics due tomorrow, and one due on Friday regarding literature. I'll get to reviewing as soon as I can, but I'm sure the other three should catch up to my pace sooner or later.

Also, GirlInTheMirror, in the future when using WRFF threads, please supply a link to your work. It's common courtesy, and we did ask this of you in our requirement section above.

Completed/Status

It's What I Do by ultraviolet
Under review.
1/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.

Beauty's Beast by GirlInTheMirror
Under review.
1/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Last edited by seeminglymeaningless on Fri Sep 24, 2010 2:23 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Wed Sep 15, 2010 6:31 pm
Nephthys says...



I would be honoured if you would review the first bit of my [attempt at a] Doctor Who episode, entitled
Attack of the Time Flies
Thanks! :)
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Thu Sep 16, 2010 12:29 am
seeminglymeaningless says...



Spoiler! :
Completed/Status

Attack of the Time Flies by Nephthys
Under review.
2/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.

Nice script! :)
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Fri Sep 17, 2010 8:50 am
Apple says...



If you please? :D

Blue Jay
I spy!
  





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Fri Sep 17, 2010 9:43 am
seeminglymeaningless says...



Spoiler! :
Done, Apple (well, I've reviewed, we're still waiting on Patch, Azrael and Dexterra to catch up).

Blue Jay by Apple
Under review.
1/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Last edited by seeminglymeaningless on Fri Sep 24, 2010 2:23 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Mon Sep 20, 2010 3:59 am
Shearwater says...



Hi Musketeers! (I think this whole idea is awesome, by the way)
Whenever you have time, could you possibly review The Devil's Pocket Watch for me?
I don't mind if you skip the prologue or comment on just one of the two.
Thanks in advance!

~Shear
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