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Jostling along a sun-scorched highway,
thin red needle slicing upward, upward (Now, I don't think it's correct to place the word 'upward' twice in this line)
as he bounces in the seat like a ragdoll, (You might want to make a new sentence here, so just capitalize 'as')
teeth glinting like mints and his laugh serrated.
The Santa Anas peel away his layers.
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