This is now the 4th draft on the first chapter of my novel based on the helpful tips and critisms so far. Thanks all and enjoy.
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Shadowstone (Working Title)
Chapter One: Easy Pickings
Vaile tossed the bag of coins in the air. She caught it, smiling as the soft chinking reached her ears. She gazed down as the men left the tavern. Her simple dark clothes hid her from view, blending her perfectly into the shadows. None of them looked up. No one ever did. It was best to keep your eyes down in the city of Eln. It was best not to be noticed. Vaile had perfected that.
As the men passed around the corner Vaile dropped from her perch onto the rough grown below. She moved silently toward the tavern and stepped inside. It was small; dusty tables stood next to a dwindling fire, small outcrops housed faintly burning oil lamps and rickety stools lined the bar. It was gone midnight and the tavern was empty, aside from one man attempting to clean a tankard with an already dirty cloth. He looked up at her with a smirk as she entered and poured out ale into the tankard he’d been cleaning.
She didn’t approach the bar right away. Instead she moved quickly across the room, gazing out of the dark windows before pulling mouldy curtains to cover them.
“There ain’t any Council spies out there, Vaile,” the barman said, his rough features barely illuminated by light of the dying fire. He pushed the ale toward her.
Vaile pulled the dark green hood of her cloak from her head to reveal a rugged clump of short, unkempt mousy brown hair. She smiled at him but didn’t reply as she pulled up a stool and took the ale. He gazed at her intently for a moment, then shook his head and started cleaning another tankard. A minute of silent passed.
“Don’t you want to know what I’ve been doing, Hurn?” Vaile asked. Hurn looked up at her again. He had seen the same mischievous glint in her eyes before, almost eleven years ago.
“I doubt it,” he said. She pouted and he gave in. “Go on then.”
Vaile responded by dropping the large bag of coins on the bar in front of him. He laughed and scooped up the bag.
“Which poor bugger did you take these from then?” he asked.
“I took it from the belt of a young man entering the Crimson Dragon; tall, dark, handsome, Officer of the Legion, you know the type,” said Vaile, putting on a fake innocent smile. Hurn turned over the bag in hands, and recognised the insignia of the legion, a silver sword wrapped in gold thread on a black background.
“I told you to stay away from the Legion’s Quarter,” said Hurn, sternly.
“I wasn’t seen,” said Vaile, rolling her eyes, “besides, someone has to support your gambling problem.” She leant back and swirled her finger in her tankard. Hurn sighed again.
“I didn’t know any of the legions had returned,” he said.
“The 7th were relieved by the 3rd at Forest’s Edge but they’re leaving for Lelm this evening and the 4th returned a few hours ago,” said Vaile. “I always listen before I steal,” she added, noticing Hurn’s raised brow.
“Just be careful,” he said after another moment of silence. Vaile stretched out a hand a wrapped it around his. She could feel him shiver as her soft skin brushed against the rough hairs on his. She didn’t say anything, merely smiled at him. Then she stood up suddenly and let go of his hand.
“You’re not going out again?” asked Hurn with a grimace. Vaile leant over the bar and kissed Hurn’s forehead.
“I’m hungry,” she said simply. Hurn didn’t have any time to argue before she was already at the door. She covered her hair with her hood, pulled open the tavern door and disappeared into the darkness.
* * *
The Crimson Dragon, the largest tavern in Eln, stood along the road which separated the Merchant's and Legion's Quarter. Unlike Hurn's quiet tavern in the Merchant's Quarter this tavern was full of people. It was, mostly unwillingly, playing host to several members of the 4th Legion.
Captain Nain and several other officers of the 4th were stretched out on fine leather chairs in front of a roaring fire. He clicked his fingers at a young barmaid as she passed.
“Bring my men another round, girl,” he commanded.
“We’re about to close, sir, sorry,” the barmaid said.
“Who do you think you’re speaking to, girl?” Nain had got to his feet and rounded the barmaid so quickly that she’d stumbled back and fallen. The man behind the bar rushed forward to help her to her feet.
“I’m very sorry, my Lord, she knew not to whom she spoke, I’ll fetch those ales for you now,” he said, head bowed.
“Make sure to teach her better manners in the future,” said Nain with a sneer.
“O-of course, my Lord,” stuttered the barman as the young girl hid behind him. Nain sneered again and slid back into his place at the fire. None of his officers addressed him directly. They feared him and that fear gave him control. Ignoring them he looked down at the maps strewn out on the small table in front of him.
* * *
Anarark looked intently at his commanding officer perusing the map. He turned away as Nain looked up him, pretending instead to take a sip from his untouched tankard. Nain looked back to map and Anarark saw a cruel smile cross his lips. Anarark gazed around the tavern, fixing first on the icy stare that the barman was giving him. Anarark was hardly surprised. The tavern had looked new when they had arrived but now bar stools were broken; pictures hung slanted on the walls and a mix of ale and vomit stained the floor. Nain was feared and respected by most of the Legion, so much so that many of those under his command had taken to imitating his brutish behaviour. It was not the first tavern Anarark had seen wrecked and he didn’t expect it to be the last.
He felt something heavy hit his leg and turned in time to see glass shatter against the table, fresh ale poured across the detailed maps. The young barmaid, who had been bringing their next round of drinks, had tripped over Anarark’s outstretched leg and dropped one the glasses.
“You idiot girl!” Nain yelled and rounded on her. Ale was dripping from a dark patch on his uniform. Anarark could see Nain’s hand rise to strike her and quickly stood up.
“Sorry, Sir,” he said, standing between Nain and barmaid, who had now scrambled away, “I tripped the girl, it was my fault.”
“Stupid bitch should have looked where she was going,” said Nain, still staring at the girl. His face calmed slightly and he turned to Anarark, “Bring the maps with you, Lieutenant.”
Nain and the others members of the 4th left, leaving Anarark alone with the barman and the young barmaid. He rolled up the soaking maps as best he could and turned to look at the tavern. It was wrecked. He reached for the pouch at his side, meaning to pay the man what money he could for his trouble. The pouch was gone, he was sure he’d brought it with him. He looked apologetically at the man and promised to return with some. The man merely stared icily back at him. As Anarark left the inn he stared up the swinging sign above the inn, a great red dragon on a green background, and promised to pay the man before the 4th moved out again.
* * *
Vaile leapt silently from roof to roof as she made her way towards the central western wall of the city, known to the inhabitants of the city as Menos, which separated the Merchant’s Quarter from the Noble’s Quarter, stopping only when guards passed on the ground below. She listened to their conversation carefully to pick up any news which was considered unworthy of the common folk. Satisfied that the guards were out of sight, Vaile leapt across the gaps between a few more buildings until the twenty-five foot wall stood before her.
Although the city had not seen an enemy combatant touch its stones in two hundred years the walls were still guarded every hour; however at this particular point of the wall she had an unspoken agreement with an elderly guard. In return for one silver piece he would pretend that his shift guarding the wall had been entirely uneventful.
Vaile’s ascent up the wall was quick, her hands and feet finding handholds that she could have found blindfolded. As she reached the top and gazed over the parapet glad to see that the elderly guard was asleep, leaning on his halberd. Vaile pulled herself on to the wall and smiled. She took a silver coin from her pocket and placed it at the guard’s feet. From this high point on the wall she had a good view of the city. Towards the south she could see a line of torches near the main gate; the 7th were moving out for Lelm as she'd heard. With a quick intake of breath she leapt over the opposite parapet and, after a neat roll, landed in a crouching position on the balcony of a tall manor house in the Noble’s Quarter.
This manor, Vaile knew, belonged to an elderly noble whose family had all moved away. The house was inhabited now by only the old man and his few select servants. Vaile slowly walked through the open balcony door and crouched on one knee again. She removed her hood and lowered her face mask, listening for any evidence of movement. A sharp snort followed by a yawn from a room down the hall made her dart behind a statue but no further sound followed. Satisfied that it was safe, Vaile made her way along the corridor towards the marble staircase that would lead her downstairs. As she reached it and gazed down at the floor below she grinned and, with a small run up, landed on the wooden banister and happily slid down it to the bottom of the stairs. Vaile dismounted early to avoid knocking down a stone sculpture before rolling once again into her usual crouched position. She listened out again before making her way toward the dining room.
Vaile reached the room without incident and pushed open the large door. She was greeted, as she knew she would be, by a long table laden with the unfinished feast of the evening. The rare meats and fruit were untouched by the man who could rarely eat solid food let alone the full roasted boar which sat proudly on the table, apple in mouth. Vaile walked along the table and picked up a bunch of grapes. She sucked two into her mouth before tossing the rest aside. As she reached the head of the table near the window she picked up the Noble’s abandoned plate and began to help herself to whatever caught her eye. She sat back in the Noble’s chair munching a piece of bread, wine in hand, humming to herself. After several minutes of silence, the sound of the heavy metal locker on the Noble’s door sounded throughout the house. Vaile swore, jumped out her seat and slipped into the curtains of the great window behind her. She pulled her hood back over her head and listened.
* * *
“By order of the Emperor you will permit entry to those bearing this message,” said the man, heavily rehearsed in this courtesy the Council saw fit to allow those of noble blood. A less than subtle change to the smashed doors and broken windows they thought more befitting to offer those in the poorer parts of the city. The man paused before continuing. “Any failure to comply-”, he was cut off by the heavy door opening in front of him.
“Apologies, my Lords,” spluttered a half-dressed, tired looking servant. “My master will be down shortly, if you’d like to come through to the dining room”. The men passed him without a word and he shut the door quietly behind them. His forced, welcoming smile was shattered by the cold looks on their faces as he lifted an arm and guided them toward the dining room.
Vaile watched them from the shadows as they entered. The voice, Vaile guessed, belonged to the man who entered first. He wore simple but expensive clothes and was rolling up a scroll; a Council servant of some kind. Vaile’s eyes were more interested however in the other three men. Two of these, who entered after the servant, she identified immediately as members of the Ithayén Guard. These men, dressed head to toe in full black body armour carried no weapons and merely had on the side of their belt a small oil lamp – burning a purple flame. They moved to either side of the door and stood silently as the last man entered. Vaile almost gasped out loud. This man, dressed in fine black hooded-robe with gold embroidery was a Superion; a member of the Council.
The man stepped into the room and gazed around it before turning to face the door way. He removed his black hood to reveal a bald head as Vaile saw the elderly merchant enter.
“My Lord,” said the noble, barely managing a bow. “How may I be of service to the Council?”
“We are here to discuss your trade contracts with various… ill-associated merchants in the outer cities,” said the Superion. The noble opened his mouth to speak but the Superion raised a black gloved finger to silence him. Vaile frowned, it was not usual for a Superion to be directly involved in something as minor as this. Usually they'd just send out the Ithayén Guard to rough them up a bit.
“The Emperor was most displeased to hear of your continued communication with the Venyari traitors even after our previous warnings,” continued the Superion.
“But, My Lord, those contracts were verified by the Council over fifteen years ago, I thought that perhaps-”
“To trade with the enemy of the Emperor is to be an enemy of the Emperor himself,” said the Superion loudly.
“But, My Lord, I can cancel the contract, if you give me just one day I can –” but the noble was cut off. In a flash of light the Superion had somehow sliced the Noble’s head from his shoulders, but the Superion had not moved a muscle. Thankfully the cry from the Noble’s servant covered Vaile’s own audible gasp as the headless body slumped to the ground. A pool of dark blood began to spread quickly across the marble floor beneath the body. The Superion looked down at the corpse with a sneer and stepped over it. With a nod to the two guards he left, followed closely by the Council servant who was looking pale.
The two guards removed a black armoured glove from their right hand and held it towards the oil lamp on their belt. Purple flames burst to life around their hands. They placed these now flaming hands on the table and it caught alight. The flames turned a more natural orange as they were fuelled by the wood of the table. The Noble’s servant gasped in terror and ran from the room. The guards followed as the fire spread around the room, igniting the door frame around them as they stepped through it. Vaile coughed as smoke filled her lungs. She wrenched open the velvet curtains covering the window as they began to smoke. Vaile grasped the window lock but it was sealed tight with years of disuse. She could feel the heat of the fire as the fine fabric of the curtains burnt away before her eyes. With no time to think she took a step back and then leapt through the window in a shatter of glass as a burst of flame exploded from the window. She landed roughly in a rose bush several feet below the window, sharp thorns ripped through her leggings. Disoriented and bleeding she crawled out of the bush.
The dark smoke from the fire had dimmed the light of the moon. Vaile could see the shadow of several people gazing up the burning house. Nobody attempted to rescue those inside.
A piece of broken glass cut deep into her left hand as she crawled away and she gasped in pain. She could feel other cuts along her legs, the warm feel of blood leaving open wounds, these, she knew, would heal in time. A more pressing matter was returning to the safety of the Merchant’s Quarter. The manor was the only safe way Vaile knew of, the others to heavily guarded. She could not risk being found in the city. Wandering at night would at best would gain her a night in the dungeons, perhaps public lashings. But if they found out she’d been trespassing she’d face execution. She bit her lip and pushed herself to her feet, trying to force back the pain.
She managed to make her way past a few houses down the street before collapsing against the wall. Her left hand was bleeding profusely and she blinked sweat out of her eyes. With her right hand she managed to tear a piece of her cloak and wrap it around her left, stemming the flow of blood. Still dizzy with pain she pushed herself back to her feet and looked for somewhere safer to stay, at least until the morning when she could escape the Noble’s Quarter amongst the crowds. She collapsed eventually in small stable behind one of the smaller houses, falling asleep against rough, cobweb ridden, straw.
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