I wrote this for a project..is it any good?
When He Fell
Michael opened his eyes to a dark starlit sky. He knew right away that he was no longer in the heavens. No, it was in a much different place…. He was on earth, one of the many planets that his father had created a millennium long ago.
He stood up and stretched. His muscles screamed in protest and his bones cracked and popped. He spread his wings out, and pulled them around to inspect them.
“No.” He whispered quietly, louder, he asked to no one, “Why did this happen?!”
His breathtaking soft white wings were now a glossy black. He was so shocked that he didn’t hear the sound of leaves and twigs being stepped on until it was too late to hide.
He braced himself, eyes closed, just waiting for a scream and retreating footsteps. Instead, he heard the exact opposite; hesitant but advancing footsteps.
He opened his eyes to see a beautiful girl standing across from him. Her green eyes were wide, showing no trace of fear, only curiosity.
“What are you?” She asked quietly, gently tucking a stray strand of her auburn hair behind her ear. He was silent, thinking about whether or not telling her the truth. Finally, he said, “I’m an angel…Er, was an angel. I was thrown out, and I fell. So, I guess I’m not an angel anymore.”
“Well, technically, you’re still an angel…you’re just a fallen angel. But there is one thing that I would like to know.” She said thoughtfully.
“What’s that?” Michael replied to her.
“Why did you fall?”
“I fell because I broke the rules. I fell for mortals and I wanted war. I’m ashamed, but I know that I deserved it… But I just remembered that I’m not the first angel to fall… No, that was Lucifer, he wanted to be higher that God himself, but he was proved wrong, and he got worse than I did. He got stripped of his wings, I still have mine, but they are no longer white. Maybe that means that I still have a chance…” He said.
“You do have a chance.” The girl replied.
“I do?” He asked, hope in his grey eyes.
“Yes.” She said, “You must save a mortal person’s life, and you will earn back what you had before.”
“How am I supposed to do that? And how do you know this?” He asked her.
“Because I am the human girl you are supposed to save. I am the girl that will have you earn the title as Guardian. You are the first one that falls and keeps his wings, and you are the first one to earn this title. In order to do that, you must save me. I am also already dead.”
“How am I supposed to save you, then?” He asked hysterically.
“I cannot say, all that you can know is my name.” She told him calmly.
“Which is?”
“Gabrielle” The girl said, and disappeared




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