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Micah
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 Posted: Fri Nov 04, 2005 6:14 am Post subject: Who |
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[I've written about five songs, but this is my latest. I play the guitar so I make up tunes to go with them on that.]
WHO
Verse 1
Did you think I wouldn‘t see through your disguise
Did you think that I would believe your lies
Come on, we’ve gotta reach a compromise
This can’t go on forever, let’s be wise
CHORUS
Who are you?
Are you really who you wanna be
Who are you?
Are you reaching for that dream you see
Don’t give up, keep going strong
Win your race, it’s not that long
Be who you were born to be
Who are you (2x)
Verse 2
You don’t need to hide away from the world anymore
To live your life in pretence is not what you were made for
Don’t you see that you only, have to open the door
This can’t go on forever, you were meant for more
CHORUS
BRIDGE
So wipe away your pain and tears
And realize that the life god gives
Came to us at the highest price
He gave us life through a sacrifice
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| Watch frocing rhymes. And an AAAA rhyme scheme is quite diffiult to pull off. Try ABAB or something similar to that. |
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Micah
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