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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby pudin.junidf on Mon Feb 01, 2010 11:18 pm

Hey Wd!
Thanks so much for the last review!
Do you think you can review this?
It's in Lyric Poetry and it called Little Missy
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Souspir s' echapper de sa bouche de fraise
qui a perdu son rire, qui a perdu sa coleur.
La princesse es d'or palce sur sa chaise
Il est essentiel muet sur votre son clavier.

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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Writersdomain on Tue Feb 02, 2010 9:37 pm

Done, m'dear! Hope that helped!
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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Evi on Sun Feb 07, 2010 5:53 pm

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It's rather long (perhaps too long; I'll appreciate your thoughts on length), so I understand if this takes a while to get to. My main concern is if the dialogue is believable for each character, and if the pace is alright. Thank you! I'd be happy to review anything you need in return.
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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Writersdomain on Mon Feb 15, 2010 1:00 am

Done, m'dear! :wink:
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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby KanenRenoir on Mon Feb 15, 2010 1:19 am

Could you check out my fantasy novel for me. It's called the Assassin's Redemption. Here's a link:
topic58817.html

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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Writersdomain on Wed Feb 17, 2010 12:18 am

Done! If you redraft it again, please do PM me, because I'd love to help however I can. :wink:
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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby TheNewHero on Sat Feb 20, 2010 5:15 pm

Hey WD.

THE Janitors (Chap 1/Part 1)
Action Adventure (Though some say it should be in either Sci-Fi or Urban Fantasy)
I'd like you to look out for clicheness and also tell me where I should post this...

Thanks!

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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Elinor Brynn on Fri Feb 26, 2010 5:29 am

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Title: Origins of a Queen
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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Writersdomain on Sat Feb 27, 2010 7:35 pm

Done and done! I apologize for slowness. Deadlines and coursework are rather heavy right now, so I'm also going to apologize in advance for slowness--you all can still request reviews, but they might take a little while. :wink:
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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby KanenRenoir on Sat Feb 27, 2010 8:17 pm

You don't have to do this right now, not even this week, but I posted another part of Chapter 1 of my novel and also Chapter 2 part 1. Here's the links if you can check the out:
topic59120.html
topic59461.html

Thanks if you can find the time. :)
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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Lauren2010 on Sun Feb 28, 2010 4:16 pm

Hey WD, I have three chapters of a Fantasy novel (Eventide) I've been working on up on YWS (and they have been up for a while I think...) but I never recieved as many reviews as I would have liked. So if you wouldn't mind looking at them? Or even just one of them would be great.

Here are the links:
Chapter 1
Chapter 2.1
Chapter 2.2
Chapter 3

Chapter 2 was kind of long, so it is in two parts. Again, you don't have to review all of them, even just the first chapter would be lovely. Thanks!

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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Shubhi on Tue Mar 02, 2010 3:43 pm

Name: Finding me back
Genre:Historical fiction
Length: Moderate
Brief Synopsis: It has a little background of US-Iraq war but a normal teenager story.
Magical a little bit I would say.Sorry,can't reveal much.
I would be really grateful to you if you review it and you are surely up for some points.

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Finding me back- prologue

Finding me back-Chapter 1
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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Valentine on Thu Mar 04, 2010 4:53 pm

I didn't read the format, if there was one. Sorry, im at school and have very little time to do this. Sorry, if this seems rude. I usually don't do this. Here's the link-

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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby Writersdomain on Sat Mar 06, 2010 7:24 pm

Done, done, done and done! :P

At this point, I really don't have time to commit to keeping up with some of the longer, multi-part pieces you all asked for help on. I will try to read the next parts at some point, but I can't promise to keep up with the different parts and review them. If there is any specific chapter or part you want me to take a look at, you can feel free to request a review on that part, but, unfortunately, I don't have time to follow multi-part stories right now! Thanks!
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Re: WD's Reviews

Postby BenFranks on Sun Mar 14, 2010 6:21 pm

Hey there WD!

Just wondering if you could review my latest chapter of my Reg Carter series in historical fiction? (It's chapter four but doesn't particularly require any background for this particular extract)

topic60175.html

By the way I've rated it 18+ for strong language so feel free to turn it away if you're uncomfortable with it! :)

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