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Postby Mars on Sat Dec 20, 2008 11:24 pm

Hey there, YWSers! I am desperate need of pieces to critique, so I'm hoping some of you can help me out.

I will critique:
~any poetry
~any fiction
~this includes fanfic & nonfic!
~lyrics
~'other'
~really anything except art.

If you want to see examples of some reviews:
~ficton
~fiction
~poetry
~poetry


Please:
~Don't freak out if I take a little while to do your review. For most I'll probably have them up within the same day, especially poetry, but sometimes it takes longer.
~Please only request one review at a time - you can come back, but wait until I've finished your first request before asking for another. If you request more than one I'll just do your first and ignore the others.
~Ask me for reviews! Please? Post your work (with a link) and I will be happy to look it over for you.

-Mars
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Postby TL G-Wooster on Wed Dec 24, 2008 12:31 am

Io! If you could review this for me, I'd really appreciate it. :) I won't bombard you with links to the other chapters either. ^_~

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Postby Maki-Chan on Thu Dec 25, 2008 7:16 pm

could you please review... topic40716.html

Its not really necessary to know what Silent hill is. And if you do wanna know Silent Hill is a town where every-one's worse nightmares take shape! There's also a chapter 1 so if you wanna read it too!


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Postby Writing for love is a pas on Sat Dec 27, 2008 2:58 am

Please please please review this!! You'd be doing me an awesome favor! *Puppy dog eyes*

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Postby silverSUNLIGHTx on Sat Dec 27, 2008 6:25 am

Please tell me if this sucks or not and I'll love you forever. :]
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Postby niccy_v on Sat Dec 27, 2008 5:07 pm

Firebird: topic40583.html

Just anything. I know it's Advanced *I pay you in lots of points if I like what you say/think you deserve them* and if you have a problem I'll love :

Stepping Into Static:
1 - topic40209.html
2 - topic40419.html

Whichever floats your boat!
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Postby silverSUNLIGHTx on Tue Dec 30, 2008 8:48 pm

My new story. Review?

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Postby Mars on Wed Dec 31, 2008 4:00 am

You guys are all done.
Please, sir, can I have some more?
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Postby WaterVyper on Sat Jan 03, 2009 2:17 pm

Do you request anything in return for reviews? I'll gladly give away stuff. Anyway, here it is. If possible, could you focus on the atmosphere? I seem to be having trouble with that.

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There once was a cat.
He wasn’t particularly fat.
Fuzzy was his favorite mat.
And really, that was that.

Oh, but did you really think so?
Keep reading, it’s just the start of the show!
And as for how far this tale will go…
Well, even the cat doesn’t know.
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Postby Antigone Cadmus on Mon Jan 05, 2009 12:23 am

*bribes with cookies*

Don't they smell nice?

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Postby Firestarter on Mon Jan 05, 2009 12:57 am

Would love if you could take a look at my story "The Lights Begin To Twinkle."

It's rough and in need of some tough love. In Other Fiction and somewhat longish.

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Postby Night Mistress on Mon Jan 05, 2009 1:07 am

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can you review this for me? it's fantasy.
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Postby Faery007 on Wed Jan 07, 2009 8:02 pm

Helloooo, I think what your doing is a nice idea and it helps others to get further in their work, here is my poem that I would like you to review, topic41363.html I don't really mind what you think haha it was one of my first poems I did when I was 13 I think, and so please tell me what I could do to improve it, and how to maybe change my other poems or my style or rhyming scheme etc etc

If you would like it would be appreciated if you would look at my other poems also, but again, I do not mind what you put hehe criticism is always welcome!

Thank you very much if you get round to reviewing it, if not then no problem!

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Postby Demeter on Thu Jan 08, 2009 5:54 pm

Hey there!

I saw you review lyrics as well, which many people don't... :D

So, I'd be glad if you did this for me:

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It's really just a bit of fun, so I don't expect you to do a line-by-line – you can just tell me whether or not it's a complete disaster! :D (It's for Jared's lyric contest.)

Thank you!

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Postby Night Mistress on Thu Jan 08, 2009 8:36 pm

hey.

can you review the rewrite version of The Elemental Gem?

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thanks
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