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Postby Adnamarine on Wed Nov 05, 2008 1:56 am

Feel like reviving a starving reviewer? You're in the right place!

I finally got some spare time and I realized I didn't know what to do with it.
Suddenly a bulbosaur appeared and told me I must review! for food!
It's true!
Okay, minus the bulbosaur part.
Oh hush.


So what do I review?
A better question would be what don't I review.
I don't do lyrics; I would really be of no help to you there. I don't like to do science fiction, or fanfic, but maybe if you're really desperate I'll give it a shot, though you'd get a much better review of it from somebody who enjoys those genres. :)

My critiques
Pretty basic, grammar, character, setting, style--for stories anyway. Poetry is another story completely.
If you want me to go very in depth, make mention of it and allow a little extra time. I'll try to be as prompt with these as possible.
If there are specific things you'd like to be looked at, post it here with your link,

Payment?
Chocolate, roses, love letters, the usual.

In Progress:


Completed:
Prologue - Maki-Chan
Heart's Illusion (chap. 1) - Maki-Chan
Creatures of Shadow - vox-nihili
In this heart of ours - vixeyt
Look - LoveableLittleSock
The Running Away Song - Clo
Brick by Brick - OverEasy
Broken, Prologue - CastlesInTheSky
Morning Memoirs, or The Unhappy Epilogue - Clo
Beta - Sheik
This Shouldn't Be prologue - Lord Anzius
Have an ice day - Demeter
A simple mistake - OverEasy
The Ripper prologue - Lord Anzius
Simple Mistake, chap. 2 - OE
The Scribe - Dr.Atl
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Postby Maki-Chan on Sat Nov 08, 2008 7:33 pm

prologue and chapter 1 need reviews ^_^


topic35779.html - prologue

topic35820.html -chapter 1
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Postby vox nihili on Sun Nov 09, 2008 2:56 am

I have a prologue sort of piece for a fantasy story. It has ghosts, human sacrifice, and lost souls. Not written to be creepy though. here's the link. :D
post447904.html#447904
In the darkest times, hope is something you give yourself.
-Avatar The Last Airbender (General Iroh)

Some people move through life normally.
Others like me have a movement disorder.


http://www.wemove.org
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Postby vixeyt on Sun Nov 09, 2008 8:42 pm

My vampire story. I'll try mail you the perfect kitten.

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The opposite of courage is not cowardice but conformity

Bee is in the house bzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
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Postby LoveableLittleSock on Mon Nov 10, 2008 8:51 pm

Hey. Could you please review this for me? It'd be greatly appreciated. Just remember to read the link first, okay? =]

topic38505.html

Thanks a bunch!
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Postby MADD94 on Sat Nov 15, 2008 4:49 am

topic38723.html it's nothing speacial but its the end of a day, then i will go to the begining after.
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Postby Clo on Tue Nov 18, 2008 6:41 am

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:wink: Pwetty pwease?
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Postby OverEasy on Thu Nov 20, 2008 5:32 pm

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I would love a review from the wonderful Adna!

Please?

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Postby CastlesInTheSky on Fri Nov 21, 2008 11:19 pm

Hello;
I will be in complete adoration of you forever and beyond if you review this: topic35040.html

Any chapter(s) you want, doesn't necessarily have to be the first one.

Thankyou so much, you lovely person. :D
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Postby Clo on Tue Nov 25, 2008 1:53 am

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You are so awesome!
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Postby Bickazer on Wed Nov 26, 2008 3:42 am

Any one of my Vicissitudes stories (in my portfolio) would be fine. :)
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Postby Lord Anzius on Sat Nov 29, 2008 3:11 pm

Boredom is a death sentence. That is why I try to be crazy. Crazy people aren't bored. I wish I were more crazy.

To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
-Giuseppe Verdi-

what more is there to life than the smell of a party, and the invitation that you just got?
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Postby Adnamarine on Sun Nov 30, 2008 8:53 pm

Lord Anzius (and this applies to everyone please), in the future please only post one thing at a time. :)
"To die by your side is such a heavenly way to die."

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Postby Demeter on Mon Dec 01, 2008 4:20 pm

Hi, Adna!

Hopefully you have time to review one of my poems:

topic39090.html

Thanks very much! And don't stress about it if you're too busy. :)

Demeter xxx
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Postby OverEasy on Fri Dec 05, 2008 11:34 pm

Err... I was hoping that because I love you, I might be able to possibly post two chapters?

They are both pathetically short... if that helps ^.^


topic39608.html

topic39694.html


If you can only get to one of them, I will still totally adore you.


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