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Poisoned Roses--Chapter 4
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Poisoned Roses--Chapter 6
Poisoned Roses--Chapter 7
Poisoned Roses--Chapter 8
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Poisoned Roses--Chapter 18

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 6:24 pm    Post subject: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 18 Reply with quote

Hey, Everyone! Very Happy Just wanted to let you know that this is like the shortest of my chapters so far but I had to cut it where it is because otherwise, if I make it the normal length, I would have to end at a really odd part.

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CHAPTER EIGHTEEN

Outside of the Manor, I can sense the turmoil inside, hear the voices rise. Cringing when I hear my name repeated continuously, I creep closer, fearing the inevitable. The moment I cross the threshold, steely hands grab me, wrapping around my upper arms like shackles. I don’t fight it but stand proud as I am dragged down into the lower levels. We pass the Council room and descend even deeper into the earth. Fear starts as a trickle in my blood stream but soon it is a full rushing river as I am shoved into the basement, the cold stone walls dripping water in an eerie consistency. I know now that they have made the judgment against me…not Isaac. This somehow highness my mood until I look up.

The gloom pins me to the floor, unable to see more than a few feet in front of me until my eyes adjust. That’s when I see the people circled around me, their eyes glowing all assortments of colors. I can pick out Nora, her purple orbs shinning the brightest out of all of them. Carmen stands beside her, his golden eyes daring not to look at me. All are riveted towards Philip whose own dark-hazel eyes glint hazily in the dark.

“Sophia Martin, you have wronged us.” Philip’s voice booms like thunder, his eyes changing quickly to a vibrant yellow—the color of fury. I look around and see many others’ turn this same buttery color; I shiver against the dirt floor, my knees throbbing from the fall.

“Fellow members have alerted me of your deceit,” Philip continues, commanding attention even in his shaky leadership position. I glare pointedly at Carmen and Nora, who glare back, their eyes blending in with the gloom as their anger rises. “Will you care to explain what you have done? Or would you rather have me explain?” Philip asks, his eyes still yellow. I see his jaw stiffen and pop and fear that if I get any closer, he will attack.

I stand trembling to my feet. “I will explain.” My voice is calm compared to what I feel inside. Philip nods and steps back into the crowd, crossing his arms over his chest. I spin slowly, looking everyone directly in the eye to show them that my fear is diminishing. I stand straighter, stopping to face Philip again. Squaring my shoulders, I look at him with determination.

“You all know the code, our Law about humans and contact with them. It is forbidden. And it is simple to understand why. Our thirst, our lust for their blood is enough to drive us all crazy. But over the years, we have adapted.

“We are able to go to school. To mingle among them, to live a normal life. But still, the contact issue is there, thriving just below the surface. We have all faced challenges; we have all almost lost the control, the will to resist.

“I have actually lost that control once. You all remember last spring when that terrible event conspired.” I pause, swallowing hard, as many more eyes blended with the dark. But I press forward, gaining confidence with Philip’s steady yellow eyes. “I had turned into a monster that night. And none of us want to be that creature of the night. Not one. But we live. We survive. We continue to face the challenges and overcome them.

“And a challenge has come to face me.

“Over the past few weeks I have come to know a human as well as I know you all. I have come to know him as a brother and sister. But a feeling I still have yet to understand has been building between the two of us. And two nights before, I gave in to my human instinct. And I have—“

“She kissed the human!” a voice rings out, startling all, including me, into a deathly silence. Carmen’s breathing is ragged as he glares at me with such ferocity that my knees knock weakly against each other. Whispers soon travel around the circle until all eyes are black and I can’t tell them apart. Philip’s eyes, however, stay yellow as he forces to stay in control.

“Silence!” he shouts. “Is this true, Sophia?” I hear the slight waver in his voice and I know he wishes for it to not be, for it to be a prank, a lie.

But I raise my head and answer in truth. “Yes. I kissed him.”

Gasps echo around the basement, resembling tiny fires being extinguished around me. I swallow hard but meet every gaze with pride. “I have no regrets!” I shout over the rising volume of the whisperings. “Everyone seeks another in their life. Another to love, another to hold, another to tell all to. For example, look at Nora and Carmen. They are to be Bonded in a few short weeks. They have found each other. And I’m extremely happy for them.

“And I have found my own in him.” This last statement makes everyone’s eyes widen and then I see many fists clench, many jaws pop, many knees bend in defensive stances.

“She’s a human-lover!”

“A hot-blooder!”

“She wants a heart of her own!” a curse so horrible rings out. I flinch openly and search for the voice but I can’t pinpoint it in the group. Philip raises his hands for calm but the Coven doesn’t respond. The crescendo rises; the circle breaks up, the vampires moving in restfulness. I shrink away from them, knowing what will come. Philip’s voice is drowned out and I know my fate.

I will be destroyed.

I will be burned at Ashton’s Slate.

I will be killed.

Soon, cries ring out about judgment, about the Silver Sword, about the Blue Fire. I think then of my family, of my human mother and father. I haven’t thought of them in over thirty years. But here the memories come, clear and fog-free. I relish them, savor them. I see my mother’s heart-shaped face, her long black hair that is mine. I spot my father, his chiseled features cutting through my memory, his olive-green eyes that are mine as well. Tears’ well, making the memories fade as the circle encloses upon me. I haven’t seen their faces so clearly in so long…if I had a heart, it would have been breaking in half now.

I soon hear the snarls, the growls of the hungry vampires. They crave my blood, my death. I close my eyes and bend to my knees, giving in. I know that I can’t fight my way out. I would be destroyed before I could reach the door. Instead, I let the many hands raise me up, getting ready to carry me to Ashton’s Slate. I feel punches and sharp elbows but I barely cringe, making the pandemonium disappear until all I can see is Isaac’s face swimming before my eyes. His gorgeous blue eyes, those luscious lips, that expressive brow. His crooked grin that makes my stomach flutter, those tender hands that hold me so softly. I reminisce of his kisses, of his spoken words of affection.

“I love you, Isaac,” I whisper through my tears as I am carried from the Manor.


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PostPosted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 8:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh *huffs and looks miffed* why did you have to end it like that?? Another awesome chapter ash, but the only thing I hated was how it ended - you're so good at those damn cliff-hangers, I so want to read more straight away!!
You should be proud of yourself as a writer, as I think you've truly nailed the art of writing Very Happy
Another great chapter, and I can't wait for more missy Wink
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 8:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

lucyy:

lol Very Happy I'm glad you liked the ending, luc hehe

Wow, thanks so much for such a compliment. *beams after reading it again*

Will post more soon.

Thanks for reading!

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 12, 2008 10:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

ARGH. I agree with lucyy
CLIFF-HANGER!!!
I have to wait again. Darn it.
Oh well.
Good chapter, too short,
I want moremoremore!!! Very Happy
Happy writing! I look forward to your next chapter Smile

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 12, 2008 4:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

There isn't a word great enough to describe your writing, Ashleylee. When I read it, I didn't see any things that needed to be fixed. But, that is a given with your writing. I look forward to reading the rest of the chapters. Mind PMing me when you post them? Thanks.

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 12, 2008 6:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Thanks so much! Very Happy

I'm sorry about the cliffhanger. I have a tendency to do that, don't I? Embarassed

Well, I will PM you when I post chapter nineteen, which should be in the next week or so.

Thanks again, Meep!

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Wow, Venom, your compliment made me smile! Very Happy

*beams with glee*

I promise to PM you next time I post. Swear to you Wink

Thanks so much for taking the time to read this!

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 12, 2008 10:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I agree with everyone, you're so good at writing cliff hangers!
Great ending, can't wait for more. Awesome chapter, not enough good words to explain it!

~Dommy Very Happy

BTW, Sorry i didn't post anything about your last chapter, I did read it and it, of course, was wonderful.

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PostPosted: Thu Oct 16, 2008 7:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

that's cruel.

you left it as a cliffhanger. i secretly know that they wouldn't kill sophia. as for carmen and Nora....consider them dead to sophia. Ever since they been bonded, they haven't acted like true friends to her. always ingoring her, friends don't do that, even if they are in love with each other.

i caught a break from my papers, but it's back to work.

pm me with you have nineteen up.

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PostPosted: Thu Oct 16, 2008 10:33 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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I'm sorry Confused Cliff-hanger Alert to everyone else that reads this Wink hehe

Thanks so much for following this!

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Thanks! Very Happy

Of course I will PM you when 19 is up. Also, PM me when chapter six is up of Poison Love

Hope you are well!

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PostPosted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 1:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Masters of the art of torture are nothing compared to you.
CLIFFHANGER.... Evil or Very Mad
Now that is true torture with this story! Wink

Amazing chapter, I have no job to do except tell you how absolutely STUPENDOUS this chapter was. It was so dramatic, you had me on the very, very, VERY edge of my seat with this and I can't wait to find out what happens! Very Happy
Other then the fact it was a torturous cliffhanger I love the ending as well, it was hopelessly romantic!

So once again, amazing, stupendous, dramatic, fantastic, romantic, excellent, marvellous, fabulous, wonderful, terrific, brilliant, tremendous, cliffhanger, incredible, nail-biting, extraordinary chapter yet! Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy
(Pats self on back for inner thesaurus Laughing )

PM me so I don't miss the next chapter(shutters at thought) thanks! I never know when I can get on the Internet anymore but I will become a vampire myself before I miss a chapter! Wink

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 16, 2008 2:33 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

You're mean to leave it hanging like that!

Arrggh!


Woow so many chapters. I will get back to you ASAP!!!!

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PostPosted: Thu Nov 27, 2008 9:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey Ash,

Awe, this was too short and the cliffhanger! Please get writing soon. Its sad that they're going to hurt Sophia just because she's going out with a human. There could be a little more description and there were some awkward sentences, that if you read through this you'll be able to find them. I just don't get why she would think of her parents now, after all these years and then think about Isaac. Isaac should be her main concern, at least that's what I think.

All in all, can't wait for the next chapter.

Keep up the good work!

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